User talk:AbbeyMaynard/Archive 1

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A cup of coffee for you!

You are an awesome peer editor! Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 16:01, 2 October 2013 (UTC)

HI

Hi Abbey! For the exercise for class I just wanted to say hello! I am also a double major, English & Study of Culture and Society just like you! I'm currently a senior at Drake and I am from St. Louis, MO. I look forward to the work we will all be doing in class!

Kapplet (talk) 17:06, 8 September 2013 (UTC)

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Feedback on your proposals

I liked your ideas. I would encourage you to see what the structures of articles are out there related to your interests. Always ask three questions:

• How does consideration of youth help illuminate the topic?" For example, disability or mental illness in Greece, mental illness in Peru, or child labor.
• Are there academic sources on this topic?
• What is out there on Wikipedia, and how can I either parallel the structure or add an edit that makes the article less Eurocentric? For example, the child labor already has country-specific articles, not about law, but about country context. Thus, "North Korea Child Labor", if you can find academic resources, would be notable just as these other examples are. You might also look at a topic like "http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Youth_Health and see how you might contribute data from a specific country.

A kitten for you!

Good start!

Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 20:16, 6 February 2013 (UTC)

Time to expand User Page!

Abbey, you've done some offline thinking that needs to be incorporated extensively into your user page so others can give you feedback.Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 22:54, 20 February 2013 (UTC)

Welcome

Hi Abbey. Welcome to Wikipedia! I'm an online ambassador for your Global Youth Studies course at Drake. If you have any questions, check out Wikipedia:Questions, ask me on my talk page, chat with us on IRC, or ask your question on this page and then place {{helpme}} before the question.

I left a response for you over on my talk page, but I'm just going to leave a copy here as well.

My name is Abbey Maynard and I just wanted to introduce myself to you. I am with Drake University's Global Youth Studies course as well as a new member of Wikipedia. I am interested in writing about disabled youth in Greece, specifically. I had a friend who recently visited Greece and told me that there are no entitlement programs for those with mental and physical disabilities so many of the homeless population is, in some way, disabled. Mental disabilities is what I would really like to research, however, I have a bit of a problem. I don't know where I should even start looking for an article to build off of. If you have any suggestions, I would greatly appreciate it! Hope to here from you soon!

Abbey

Hi Abbey. Welcome to Wikipedia and thank you for introducing yourself. I think homeless Greek youth with developmental disabilities is probably too narrow of a topic for its own article, but the topic could potentially be addressed in another article that has a broader focus. For instance, the article for street child has a 'By country' section that currently has nothing for Greece. Wikipedia has a handful of articles for homelessness by country, such as Homelessness in Canada, but there is not yet an article for Homelessness in Greece. I hope that helps. Gobōnobō ^{+ c} 19:29, 12 February 2013 (UTC)

Classmate Feedback

Hi Abbey,

I was going to offer advice along the lines of what Gobonobo suggested. I think Professor Vandegrift wants us to look at more than one country, so it might be useful to do more of a comparative look at three different countries and their homeless youth populations. How does the homeless youth population in Greece differ from the population in the United States or in Mexico? Because of the format of Wikipedia, you could not incorporate these together in a comparative study, but you could create three different sections in the Street Child article. While you are researching, you could definitely pay attention to differences between countries and highlight them in the different sections. Statistics would be especially helpful in research like this, along with an understanding of the policies that are in place and how they affect the youth population. The problem with the latter is trying to maintain neutrality. Since we live in the United States, it might be helpful to start with the research you can find about homeless youth in the United States and then move to Greece and possibly either other countries in Europe or a developing country. I hope this helps! Court caitlin (talk) 03:13, 22 February 2013 (UTC)

Classmate Feedback

Abbey-

Another interesting direction to take a comparative study in would be to examine some of the sociological elements of Greek culture that have framed the various ways in which Greek society reacts to youth. If there is, as you say, a lack of services for street children, what are the various stigmas or social attitudes that have made them a low priority for the Greek government. While this type of research may not translate specifically into the entries you make in the Street Child article, it might help to counteract the tendency toward bias that User:Court caitlin mentioned above by placing the issue in a cultural context. KLi 32 (talk) 03:11, 23 February 2013 (UTC)

Proposal for Street Child Edits

Feedback

You have created some very strong, specific ideas. I would like you to edit this one more time into a three paragraph (all three paragraphs together) proposal that you will then place on your user page. I think you're also ready to place all or part of the street children article in the sandbox (training here) and start working through a to-do list of specific edits. As I've mentioned elsewhere, I think it'd be groovy to check in with the Rice student who is working on street children in India. Great work!Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 21:07, 7 March 2013 (UTC)

Restructure

On the street child page, there is no information on countries like the United States. The countries currently explored on the page are: Russia, China, India, Vietnam, Pakistan, Romania, Brazil, The Philippines, Latin America, and Turkey. In order to enhance the frame of reference for the global south I will add a United States section under countries. I will include areas with high street children populations, U.S. specific causes and history of street children, and ways the US government and non-governmental organizations (NGOs) are trying to combat the issue. My primary interest in advancing this article is to expand the knowledge of Grecian street children with disabilities. To follow the format previously set forth in the above paragraph, this issue will fall into both the causes and government and NGO sections. Another issue I see fault with is the out-datedness of most of the figures. I will return to the citations where the numbers come from and attempt to find more recent ones. If there are not more recent numbers there, I will look for them with other sources—possibly the census result in the U.S. from 2010. The history section for street children is Eurocentric and mostly focused on Soviet Russian writing. I will expand the global history of street children (much like I did in my edit of the Causes section of Street Child last week). Depending on how much more I can find, it would be ideal to cut back on the sizable information on Soviet Russia. Namely, there is a large quote taking up most of the section that needs to be reduced at the very least, eliminated completely at the very most.

Specific Edits

Some more specific edits I will attempt to fix are included in my Talk for Street Child. With further consideration, these are edits I feel are essential to enhance the article. To quote myself, “In Statistics and Distribution, I would cut China out of economically unstable [classification] considering it has the second largest GDP in the world right now. India is also experiencing economic growth (and even mentions this later in the article in the India section), so it might be best to cut that, too. A lot of the numbers included in this section are from the early 2000s. Due to economic strife in much of the world (especially after the market crashed) it might be necessary to get some new numbers. For specific countries, information needs to be expanded [as] a whole. More specific efforts by government and NGOs should be accounted for as well as possibly institutional reinforcement of the condition. By this, I mean what the government and economic system is doing to keep street children a sustained problem. The Causes section is weak and should include more examples: like mental illness, physical handicaps, specific family problems (i.e. abuse of job loss, and lack of entitlement programs and health care. The following countries also need more (or better) citations: Russia, Brazil, China, Vietnam, and Pakistan. Response by government and NGO response could also use more concrete examples.” Another suggestion that could fit along with causes is also LGBT discrimination. This could be added on top of the edits I made in Causes as a cultural taboo.

Additional Sources and Information

A few years ago, there was a unitary replacement of the Street Child article. There may be viable information and even citations to draw back into for more information. To fill in gaps left by the newer article, I may transplant some of the older article, too. If time permits, I may do one of two other things: updated the rest of the countries to follow the same format of the proposed US and Greece sections, or add another country with a high street child population.

AbbeyMaynard (talk) 22:26, 2 March 2013 (UTC)

Some bubble tea for you!

Thanks for offering citations and useful suggestions to your peers in your feedback to them. This is exactly the kind of feedback all of us need. Also, your contributions on Talk:Street Children rock!!!! Put them into action!!!! I think you could potentially work towards getting an official upgrade in the quality of the article Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 20:52, 7 March 2013 (UTC)

First edits to street child

Hi Abbey. I'd like to give you some feedback on your first edits to the street child article. You'll want to be careful to avoid closely paraphrasing your source. In your edit you wrote:

For example, some children in parts of Congo and Uganda are made to leave their family because they are suspected to be witches bringing bad luck upon their family. In Afghanistan, young girls who preform "honor crimes" like adultery (which may include rape or sexual abuse) or refusing an arranged marriage.

And the source you used read:

In parts of Congo and Uganda, families and communities sometimes accuse children of being witches and for bringing bad luck upon them. In Afghanistan girls may end up on the streets after they have been forced to leave home for commiting 'honour crimes' like adultery (i.e. being raped or sexually abused) or refusing an arranged marriage.

Also, the War Child source is probably okay, but you'll want to use better sources from now on. Journal articles/books are the best and newspaper articles/magazines are a close second. Advocacy organizations like War Child usually get their facts right, but are prone to incorporate their bias into their promotional copy.

Your [[wikilinks]] looked good, but your reference was formatted incorrectly. I find the easiest way to do references is to use the toolbar at the top of the edit window. If you click on the 'Cite' arrow and then 'Templates' and select one of the options, a window will pop up. After you fill in the fields and click 'Insert', it will automatically create a reference. Gobōnobō ^{+ c} 22:08, 10 March 2013 (UTC)

A link that might help

Hi Abbey - keep up the good work, and use Gobonobo's helpful feedback. Here is an article on how to incorporate other's work into Wikipedia while too close a paraphrase. Wikipedia:Close paraphrasingProf.Vandegrift (talk) 04:30, 13 March 2013 (UTC)

Feedback on 3.27 sources

Hi AbbeyMaynard. These are some valid sources to start with. I think all of them can be thoughtfully used to incorporate into the street children edit. Here are my suggestions.

• Please make sure your links work for someone not on Drake's campus.
• Can you link your sources to the proposed edits on the Talk:Street child page? What do you still need to find in light of the outstanding proposals you made here?
• Did you look for a general literature review or report on street children that could help bring the fragmented nature of the article back to a core, orientated principle for the introductory material?
• When you have more solidly identified the research gaps, you can return to the reference librarians and to me with a specific question of help finding X, Y, or Z.

Your post on Talk:Street child page was excellent - keep it as your focus for references, etc.Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 17:45, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

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Peer Review

Hi Abbey! I got a chance to read through your article, and I think you've done a stellar job with it so far. The new information you provided in the Greece and United States sections is very concise and well cited, though I noticed quite a few issues with the formatting of references in the introduction and statistics sections. The history and causes look cleaner though, so I'm guessing it's something you're aware of and have been working on. The only suggestion I really have is to take out the direct quotes and paraphrase with a citation instead. It's Wikipedia standard and much easier to read that way. And finally, I really love the formatting of the article with indentations and photos on either side of the page; it gives the article a nice flow that's readable and engaging. All in all I think it's a great article, so nice job! (I'll get you the hard copy of my feedback in class, unless you'd prefer it by e-mail. In that case just leave a note on my talk page.) Jesswalther (talk) 01:43, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

Peer Review

Abbey- I emailed you the rubric with comments on it. I think you did a fantastic job already and you are on the right path for a great page! Scarlson0921 (talk) 19:57, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

Feedback on Street children

Hi Abbey. Thank you so much for your work on the Street children article. I left some detailed feedback on that article's talk page. Some of the feedback is general and doesn't apply to your changes, but there are a couple of things that it would be great if you could clear up before you disappear. We could use page numbers for the Street Kids: The Lives of Runaway and Thrownaway Teens references. Also if you could clarify the 'million or more street children' in India bit. Most of the rest is just stylistic, formatting stuff. Thanks, Gobōnobō ^{+ c} 20:03, 16 May 2013 (UTC)

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Introduction

Hi Abbey. My name is Laura Schnabel. I am currently in Professor Vandegrift's Global Youth Studies course this fall. I am 24 years old, work as a Lab Tech at Madison County Memorial Hospital, and my favorite color is purple. I recently got married in August. I am returning to Drake after four years off to finish my Sociology degree. I am excited to be in this class and to learn a lot! Hope to see you soon! Have a great weekend! Lhegtvedt (talk) 22:40, 5 September 2013 (UTC)

Hi there!

Hi Abbey my name is Hector and I am currently in Professor Vandegrifts class. I am a Law, Politics, and Society major and I am excited to be in Global Youth studies! I look forward to learning new information this semester!Camotero2013 (talk) 00:39, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

Introduction

Hello Abbey! My name is Danyelle and I am in Global Youth Studies this semester. I am a senior, sociology major. I appreciate you taking time out to help us. I look forward to getting advice and learning new things from you throughout the semester! Dcole12 (talk) 02:22, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

Hello

Hi Abbey, My name is Ernada and I am a junior, sociology major student. I am looking forward to working with you this semester and thanks for taking time to help us. Your article looks great on street children. I plan on doing my article on juvenile youths.

Ekarajic (talk) 04:16, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

Greetings!

Hi there Abbey, my name is Nora. I am a senior International Relations and Religion double major, and this is my first sociology class at Drake! I think it's great that you have continued to work with the GYS class, and I'm sure well be in touch frequently throughout the semester! Best of luck with your classes. NSully83 (talk) 19:16, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

Hello!

Hi Abbey! My name is Trevor and I am currently a junior with my concentration in Sociology. I look forward to working with you this semester on our Global Youth Studies project! Tapbh (talk) 21:39, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

Hello!

Hi Abbey! My name is Susan Nourse. I am currently a sophomore news/internet and sociology major. I'm really looking forward to working with you on the Global Youth Studies project this semester. :)Susan2016 (talk) 23:48, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

Hey!

Hello Abbey! My name is Kelly and I am a sophomore LPS and Sociology double major. I look forward to being able to work with you this semester and thank you in advanced for your help! Kelly0327 (talk) 02:22, 9 September 2013 (UTC)

Ravi Patel - Talk page

Hey Abbey,

Thanks for helping me!!!!

Qwertyp23 (talk) 00:08, 11 September 2013 (UTC)

Meet Friday??

Hi. Would Friday at 4 PM work? Sorry, that's kind of late,but I will get off work at 2:30 that day in Winterset...If not, let me know. Thank you! Lhegtvedt (talk) 20:42, 6 November 2013 (UTC)

Meet Tomorrow

Hi Abby. I was wondering if it was possible to meet up tomorrow, Wednesday, November 6 around 3 PM? I hope you find this. Sorry but I am having trouble with my e-mail tonight. Thank you!!

Lhegtvedt (talk) 03:22, 6 November 2013 (UTC)

Sources

Hi Abbey! I've added a list of possible sources on my user page. Let me know what you think! I hope I formatted them well enough, let me know if I should have done so in a different way.

Kapplet (talk) 00:45, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

Abbey, I have added some possible sources on my page. Could you take a look at them and tell me what you think. Dcole12 (talk) 00:38, 10 October 2013 (UTC)

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