Talk:Yume Nikki: Dream Diary

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Review: July 22, 2024. (Reviewed version).

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Passed. Skyshiftertalk 21:10, 22 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

This review is transcluded from Talk:Yume Nikki: Dream Diary/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: Adam (talk · contribs) 02:11, 4 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Skyshifter (talk · contribs) 23:07, 8 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this soon. Skyshiftertalk 23:07, 8 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Images have valid fair use rationales
No copyvio

Infobox and lead

The lead describes the game as an "adventure horror game", but this isn't sourced in the body and the infobox only has "adventure" as a genre.

Done added to body and horror to infobox; publications are somewhat loathe to precisely define its genre but this seems like a fair summary (i.e. not all of them say "it is a horror game" but they don't contradict the critics who do call it one)

I did a minor copyedit to the lead.
"and according to Playism" – this can be removed. You usually don't need to attribute what the developers themselves say about their game, and this doesn't seem like a controversial statement

Done - this seems reasonable given my rereading of sources now, but for context it's unknown to what extent he was involved with the game and (I don't care to pull up every source to check which) I recall at least one or two sources questioning the claim entirely as there was really no way of confirming Kikiyama's involvement. Because most sources appear to have taken their word for it, I removed it, but it could certainly undergo a larger discussion if someone challenged it.

"supervision by" → "supervision from"

Done

Gameplay

While the lead describes Dream Diary as an "adventure horror game", this is not mentioned here.

Done

"2004 game Yume Nikki" – link the game here

Done

"exited" → "left"

why?

"The game has a minimal plot" → "Dream Diary has a minimal plot"

Done

"although ~~there are~~ some cutscenes ~~which~~ contain", for simplicity

Not done - this is to emphasize the presence of the cutscenes, which might not be expected for a "plotless" game; "...although there are cutscenes..."

Link "items" to Item (game terminology)

Done

Development and release

Remove link from Yume Nikki if added to Gameplay

Done

You can remove "reportedly" here, for the same reason as for removing "and according to Playism" in the lead

Done

I did some rewriting and adding to this section as well

Reception

You should try to add the reviews by MeriStation (reliable per WP:VGRS) and TechTudo (large Brazilian tech website; GAs like Pixel Gun 3D use it).

will do tomorrow

Done

"he and Shive complimented the creature designs" cite the DualShockers review again

Done

"lambasted" in the second paragraph seems to strong? "Criticize" or something similar would work
"criticized" is used a lot in the last paragraph; could replace with other words

Spotchecks

Soon. Skyshiftertalk 18:23, 13 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Just a note that I'll be adding those reviews and possibly one or two more sources in the next ~day, would appreciate those being included in checks as well. Thank you! ~Adam^{(talk · contribs)} 19:16, 15 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Skyshifter: Sorry for the delay, added everything I wanted to, including the two sources you mentioned. ~Adam^{(talk · contribs)} 01:25, 19 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Checking 1, 3, 7, 16.

1: OK, though I'm a little unsure on the "bootleg DVD covers" part. The article implies that Smith directly compared the world designs to "bootleg DVD covers", but in the source it wasn't direct.
3: OK
7: OK
16: OK

On hold Skyshiftertalk 01:14, 20 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I changed the reception section a little and the part about the Smith review should read better/more accurately now. Let me know if there's anything else ~Adam^{(talk · contribs)} 20:05, 22 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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