Talk:Tropical Storm Fern

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Review: October 28, 2014. (Reviewed version).

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 02:28, 1 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

" began to have deep convection" - "have" --> "produce"

Switched.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"sheared by a shear line" - is redundant

Removed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"weakened back to a tropical storm" - since JMA is official, it was never officially a typhoon, therefore it couldn't weak back to a tropical storm

Better?—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"A cargo ship was abandoned after it was damaged by high winds." - was this on Yap? If so, you should mention that. If not, then the subsequent sentence should clarify it's Yap.

Added a word.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"and JMA began tracking it at 0000 UTC" - you should add "as a tropical depression" here

Done.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"westernly" - is not a word

Not sure why spellcheck isn't highlighting this.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"The storm received the name Fern." - this is a short, dumpy sentence that I'm sure could be merged into the previous or subsequent one.

Merged to previous sentence.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"Eighteen hours later" - when you start a new paragraph, you should always indicate what the date is

Better?—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"JMA continued to keep the same strength at that time." - same strength as what?

Added the category.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"Fern reached its peak at 140 km/h (90 mph) north of Yap, according to JTWC" - why is this inconsistent with the infobox?

...I don't know. I'll check why later.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

@Hurricanehink: I gave up on trying to fix it. For the infobox, 150 km/h rounds up to 95 mph, not 90.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)
Should I just hardcode this in?—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"975 millibars" - convert to hPa

Converted all pressures.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"On the next day, JTWC downgraded Fern back to tropical storm strength, with winds of 110 km/h (70 mph).[4] At the same time, the storm had weakened to 80 km/h (50 mph)" - how is this possible?

Derp. Fixed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

Why did the storm move the way it did?

Added a bit more, not sure if enough though.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

What allowed Fern to strengthen initially?

@Hurricanehink: The ATCR doesn't say anything about strengthening initially. It only says "Reaching peak intensity after turning northward is a common behavior in TCs in north-oriented patterns." Would that count?—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

Yea, maybe mention something like that. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:16, 21 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done?—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"Yap was directly hit by Fern on Christmas Day, and about $3 million (1996 USD) of damage was caused." - try rewriting in active voice

Better?—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"The island constantly received gusts around 93 km/h (58 mph)." - constantly? For how long? And why this very specific reading

Fixed?—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

'costing half of the damage" - use "accounting for" instead of "costing"

Changed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

"On January 15, 1997, a state of emergency was declared for Yap by Acting President Jacob Nena" - this is false according to the ref, which says it happened on the 3rd

Fixed.—CycloneIsaac (Talk)

That's it for now. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:28, 1 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

So far so good for the fixes. Lemme know when you're done with them. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:35, 3 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I just read the ATCR for myself. How come you didn't include that the storm was a twin with a storm in the SHEM? You should also say it formed from the monsoon trough. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:16, 21 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I added it.—CycloneIsaac (Talk) 17:35, 21 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

A-class review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

Withdrawn. For some reason. Mario Jump 83! 22:57, 6 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Tropical Storm Fern (1996)

Nominator(s): Nova Crystallis (Talk) 07:50, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It's been a while since I've done an ACR like this (it didn't go well last time). Let's see how it goes. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 07:48, 11 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from MarioJump83

I'll review this. The article, frankly, is very small in size, but, it doesn't matter.

0600 UTC should be 06:00 UTC and so on. All of them should be changed.
150 km/h (90 mph) Why this text doesn't use convert template instead?
10 minute and 1 minute should be 10-minute and 1-minute.

Other than that, this is good. Mario Jump 83! 11:15, 6 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

However, the author requested withdrawal of the ACR because of some reason, thus this ACR will not continue. I decided to give some comments about it. Mario Jump 83! 22:57, 6 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page, such as the current discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.