Talk:The College Dropout
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where is the info on the grammys he won?
[edit]how come his grammy nons/win arent here anywhere? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.255.231.9 (talk) 03:35, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
<^>v!!This album is connected!!v<^>
[edit]- All song titles serve as redirects to this album, have their own pages, or have been placed at the appropriate disambiguation pages.--Hraefen Talk 23:20, 27 July 2006 (UTC)
Producers on the album
[edit]I've just organized the entire track listing of the album however I've just discovered something odd. Next to the Title of the tracks you will see the featuring artists but also a few names beside them. Are these producers? If so then what does "All tracks produced by Kanye West. "Last Call" also produced by Porse" mean? Remember all I did was organize the track listing and kept all information intact. --Xangel (talk) 05:32, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
That's the song writersKearF (talk) 16:27, 10 October 2008 (UTC)
The Washington Post review
[edit]Transcription using Google News Advanced News Archive Search. The Washington Post (Warminsky, Joe. C.05. March 3, 2004) review of The College Dropout (2004):
Hip-hop fans are gobbling up Kanye West's ambitious CD "The College Dropout," largely because of two ubiquitous singles: "Through the Wire," an account of the auto accident that left the producer/rapper's jaw wired shut, and "Slow Jamz," a consciously gooey homage to lite-soul singers. FM stations of all stripes probably won't tire of them until the summer is over.
Like any unrefined resume, the rest of "The College Dropout" probably should've been much shorter, but its ambition pays dividends. West's easygoing personal poetry holds up against the lyrical offerings of guests Jay-Z, Ludacris, Common and Talib Kweli. As a producer, West has made his name by building quirky R&B-based beats for such rappers. As an MC, he also sticks to a basic theme: There is more than one way to effectively navigate young adulthood.
For West, finding his way meant forgoing higher education while also realizing that a job in clothing retail would bring nothing but frustration: "Take me to the back and pat me, askin' me 'bout some khakis /But let some black people walk in, I bet you they show off their token blackie," he raps on "Spaceship. Despite all those thoughtful verbals, West's grooves are the reason to hang around through all the guest appearances and sardonic anti-college skits.
He returns often to his signature production gimmick -- speeding up vocals from vintage songs to the point where they lose most of their familiarity -- but a lot of the soul on "The College Dropout" comes from within. The bass lines are melodic, the choruses are musical, and West shows a balance between patience and imagination. Examples of that approach are everywhere: The groove for "Breathe In Breathe Out" sounds as if West has a Stax/Volt horn section on a toggle switch; the jam-packed "We Don't Care" is equal parts head trip and street beat; and the stomping, piano-based rhythm of "School Spirit" is as good as anything Prince Paul created in his heyday with De La Soul.
West's rapping and producing skill-sets coalesce the best on "Jesus Walks," where he sticks up for his spirituality while backing himself with a dramatic, nearly militant sample from a hymn by the Arc Choir. Lyrics such as "I ain't here to argue about his facial features /Or here to convert atheists into believers" put West in a class by himself. He's no preacher, no professional sinner and no trained intellectual -- he's just a guy who figured out how to comfort himself in a world where it can be tough to make ends meet.
— Joe Warminsky
Dan56 (talk) 06:40, 26 December 2009 (UTC)
Dead Links
[edit]- The link for citation 72 is a 404.
Is such an extensive biography on Mr. West necessary for this page?
[edit]It's a well-written biography, but I don't think it really is needed in a discussion about the album. Mr. West already has an extensive wikipedia page detailing his upbringing, why is it repeated here? Anyone interested in Mr West's background can click the hyperlink and go to his personal page. I think the background section should be removed or at leas drastically pared down to just what was important to the album. Ella Plantagenet (talk) 23:29, 6 September 2011 (UTC)
- Agree. But about overlinking, per WP:MOS (linking), terms within the article's body should be linked on first-reference only, and even general terms can be linked as long as they are relevant enough and contribute to making the prose clearer for readers. Dan56 (talk) 00:08, 7 September 2011 (UTC)
- Okay, so there's still a ton of overlinking in this article that falls under that definition. I'm going to go through one more time and take ONLY the repetitive linking out. Also, I was going to rework a more concise introductory paragraph and post it here for some thoughts before I changed it outright on the page. Ella Plantagenet (talk) 21:36, 9 September 2011 (UTC)
- That's fine, but terms should be linked on first-reference not for the entire article's parts, but first-reference in the lead, first-reference in the body, etc. (Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style/Linking#Principles) So things that are linked in the body may be also in the lead. Dan56 (talk) 02:08, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
Contents
[edit]I Have Noticed That Some The Songs In The Contents Section Are Out Of Order. And Some Of The Meanings Of The Songs Are WAY Too Simple. I Request That These Errors Be Fixed. I Also Request That You Go To The Wiki Pages For His 2nd, 3rd and 5th Albums as to how i think this should be done. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 120.144.7.194 (talk) 08:30, 13 November 2011 (UTC)
GA Review
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Reviewer: Bruce Campbell (talk · contribs) 18:43, 20 February 2012 (UTC)
There were some minor fixes that I would suggest:
Background
"He also crafted hit songs for Ludacris, Alicia Keys, and Janet Jackson." Reference this please.
"Despite his proven talent and success as a producer, West's true aspiration was to be a rapper." "Proven talent" should be removed.
"In a desperate attempt to keep their gifted producer from defecting to another label," Gifted should be removed, perhaps switch it with "acclaimed" or something. Also, "desperate attempt" is biased.
Music
"even his former boss at the Gap". Wikilink to the Gap (clothing retailer).
"Never Let Me Down" uses a Jay-Z verse first heard in the remix of his song "Hovi Baby".[27][28] [25][29][30][31]" Only one reference is required, preferably 29.
Also, there should be a musical sample or two of these songs, and if you can't manage to do that, I would be willing to upload them for you.
General
The personell section is incredibly long, it should really be collapsed to make the article a little easier to navigate at first glance, but it's not really highly important. Also, with the exception of the album cover, there's not a single image on the article. I would suggest adding one of Common or Mos Def in either the content or single section, or what have you.
And really, that's about it. If these can be fixed then the article can easily be passed. Bruce Campbell (talk) 22:05, 20 February 2012 (UTC)
Other comments
[edit]- Paragraph 3 of "Background" is nearly uncited.
- A bunch of links are dead.
- All of the chart positions need to be cited.
- Citations 29, 42, 50, 51 and 78 are bare URLs.
- Citation 18 needs a page number.
- Possible unreliable sources: 27, 28, 31, 36 (should be replaced by official sites), 41 and 42.
And that's it. Those citation numbers are from this version. What a pro (talk) is on fire. 08:15, 21 February 2012 (UTC)
- I think that the Commercial performance section could be expanded as it currently only has information about how the album performed in the United States. Did it chart in any other countries?
- Additionally, much of the "Content" section is copied directly from the sources given without quotes: "The over-the-top "The New Workout Plan" is both a hilarious parody of an aerobics routine and a platform for West to wrap his words around weird shifts in tempo and style." Calling the songs "hilarious" without quotes is not NPOV. This section may need to be completely rewritten. Basilisk4u (talk) 16:03, 28 February 2012 (UTC)
Drive-by nomination
[edit]This article was nominated on February 18, 2012, by User:ItalA19. The user made four edits that day, the first made since 2010, and hasn't been seen since.
As the review is 40 days old, the nominator is extremely unlikely to be back, and no one from the article's history has addressed any of the issues here—the later ones, including the "Content" section problems, are quite significant—I think it is time to close out the nomination. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:13, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- Agree, I'm failing this. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:08, 2 April 2012 (UTC)
GA Review
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Reviewer: Brandt Luke Zorn (talk · contribs) 02:28, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
All told, this is really close to getting a GA. Very comprehensive, well-researched, relevant information. Most of my comments are about wording, with just a few relating to information. I made a few minor edits myself.
Certain facts could use a year; "Kanye West was born in Atlanta, Georgia," "After graduating from West Aurora High School""Serving as in-house producer for Roc-A-Fella Records" the or an in-house producer? I'm assuming an and I think most readers would, but it's worth clarifying.Here, you say that "Through the Wire" "helped lay the foundation" for College Dropout. The article for "Through the Wire" is a bit more specific: "Although he initially had trouble convincing Roc-A-Fella Records executives to let him make his own album as a rapper, he was able to change their minds after the song's release." That article also specifies that it was first circulated on a mixtape and then officially released as a single. So, does this mean that "Through the Wire" was released as a stand-alone single before there were ever plans for the album?Citation 21 is just "(2004-07) Ebony"; is there any more information (article title, issue number, etc?)"in favor of more diverse, topical proponents" Proponents isn't quite the right word"life-related" is also a bit awkwardly phrased, but I know what you mean. Maybe something like "drawn from his own experiences and observations"?"The next track, "Graduation Day", features Miri Ben-Ari on violin and John Legend with heavily auto-tuned vocals to the point where he is hard to understand." The reference following this sentence does not mention Miri Ben-Ari or Legend's performance on that trackSome lack of clarity and redundancy: "Gospel hymn "I’ll Fly Away" proceeds track "Spaceship", a track with a relaxed beat where West muses about wanting to work in a spaceship. The song features GLC and Consequence, the latter of which makes comparisons to modern day retail working with slavery.""On "Jesus Walks" West declares his belief in Jesus and touches upon his views with contemporary hip-hop." The second part of this sentence could use some fleshing out, otherwise it just vaguely reads as "he had a view". Specifically, he thought mainstream contemporary hip-hop marginalized/was afraid to talk about religion."West commenting about racism." another case where more details would be good.""Never Let Me Down" uses" unless I missing a nuance, "reuses", right?I know Wikipedia's all about minimizing samples, but for an album this significant, in my opinion, more might be warranted. By no means does it need more samples to pass GA, this is just a suggestion. "Jesus Walks" probably has the most musical support in the text (not to mention, I always think of this as such a definitively Kanye beat; "Power" and some other later ones are totally in the same vein so it reflects his overall style pretty well). "Slow Jamz" would also be a good choice since it's referencing such a specific sound."The album's first single and West's debut single, "Through the Wire", debuted at number ninety-four on the Billboard Hot 100 and peaked at number fifteen on February 3, 2004 for five weeks. It remained on the chart for twenty-one weeks." same confusion as earlier; was the single perceived as a single from the College Dropout, since [it sounds like] it predated plans for the album's release?"The song contains violin by Miri Ben-Ari." Aha! Here's the correct footnote for that earlier note, I think. This fact would probably be better in the Music section."On June 3, 2009, West uploaded the video on his official blog. ... West uploaded the video on his official blog in May 2009." Some repetitive wording, probably should merge those sentences."By April 2004, it had sold in excess of 1 million copies in the United States." If this is drawn from the certification alone, that just means that the album has shipped, and not necessarily sold, a million copies (or even more precisely, that marks the date that the RIAA actually recognized that one million copies had shipped). This could probably be merged with the following sentence and should specify that a Platinum certification had been issued."Following the release of the album, West received 10 Grammy nominations." "following the release"—of course! Naming the approximate date of the nomination announcements would be more useful."was nominated for a Grammy Award for Best Rap/Sung Collaboration" What was?"and is often listed amongst the greatest debut albums ever released by a hip hop artist." It surely is, but I don't see any of that later in the article.
Last note: The Chris Rock mention made me think of his list of the 25 greatest rap albums. The College Dropout isn't on it but it's a fun read. --Brandt Luke Zorn (talk) 02:28, 15 March 2013 (UTC)
Sorry if took some time, but I've started to deal with your requests. igordebraga ≠ 18:44, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
Did some more, can you strike some more? igordebraga ≠ 04:08, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
- Struck some more comments. Make sure all references are formatted consistently. --Brandt Luke Zorn (talk) 15:55, 31 March 2013 (UTC)
Think that I solved what remained with the help of a few new refs. igordebraga ≠ 05:48, 5 April 2013 (UTC)
The introduction seems a little contradictory
[edit]"The production of the album was often halted by the lack of confidence that producers had in West's rapping ability" but "The album's production was handled entirely by West" So West lacked confidence in himself and kept stopping work? Really?83.206.139.99 (talk) 15:29, 2 November 2015 (UTC)
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Location Source
[edit]Is there a source for "At one point, West hovered between making a portion of the production in the studio and the majority within his own apartment in Newark, New Jersey. Because it was a two-bedroom apartment, West was able to set up a home studio in one of the rooms and his bedroom in the other."? The new Netflix Documentary Jeen-Yuhs mentioned Hoboken not Jersey City.
There is no mention of Jersey City in the citation. In the Rolling Stone article below it says Hoboken. This is also confirmed by him mom on page 237 in her book (image link below). Complex also mentions Hoboken and not Jersey City (link below). As does Billboard.
- https://www.rollingstone.com/music/music-news/kanye-west-head-of-the-class-77187/
- https://imgur.com/a/ZGl090d
- https://www.complex.com/music/2014/02/kanye-west-interview-before-college-dropout
- https://www.billboard.com/music/rb-hip-hop/kanye-wests-the-college-dropout-an-oral-history-5893976/ — Preceding unsigned comment added by 100.1.158.25 (talk) 20:30, 21 February 2022 (UTC)
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