Talk:Sakura Wars 3
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 16:32, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
Opening for review. Courcelles (talk) 16:32, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
- "Defined as a "dramatic adventure" game," Defined by whom?
- Clarified.
- "Ichiro Ogami arrive in Paris to join the newly formed Paris Assault Force and train "Paris Division", an all-female unit established by Paris' government dedicated to fighting supernatural threats against the city while maintaining their cover as a cabaret act." Is there a way to rephrase not to say "Paris" four times in one sentence? Also, that's just a VERY long sentence in general.
- Done my best with this.
- "—, " Just the emdash will do,l no comma, no space.
- Simplified this.
- What is Les Chatte Noir? I mean literally, the black cat, but I've never heard of it, nor would define Montmarte this way.
- I've explained what it is further down, following the modification inspired by your above observation.
- "During the adventure segments, Ogami navigates Montmartre and the Le Chatte Noir from his apartment." Presumably you mean "starting from his apartment"?
- Yep. Thanks for spotting that.
- " to adjust to intensity of a single answer" To adjust to intensity? Check your wording.
- I meant "the". Thanks for the catch.
- " Paris Division fight monsters" fights monsters.
- Sorted.
- Unusual place to bring in the first mention of the "Flower Division" Who are they?
- It's not the first mention. They're introduced in section's first paragraph.
- "raise a character's Motivation," Raises.
- Corrected.
- "Sakura Wars 3 opens with Imperial Army Lieutenant" Don't pipe that link, let it specify Japanese directly.
- Done.
- You know what, you could answer at least four of these concerns simply by moving Synopsis above Gameplay. A lot of my answers are down here.
- I'm a little uncertain about this, but alright I've moved it.
- "A major theme of the game was talking with people" Is, as the game still exists.
- Sorted.
- Was it ever released outside Japan?
- No. Clarified in the text.
Courcelles (talk) 16:58, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
- @Courcelles: I've done my best to address all your concerns. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:00, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
- Re-reading. Courcelles (talk) 21:03, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
- Looks good. Promoting. Courcelles (talk) 21:08, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
- Re-reading. Courcelles (talk) 21:03, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
Orphaned references in Sakura Wars 3: Is Paris Burning?
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Reference named "SakuraRussia":
- From Sakura Wars 2: Thou Shalt Not Die: "Акелла - Игры - Войны Сакуры 2" (in Russian). Akella. Archived from the original on December 9, 2016. Retrieved May 16, 2017.
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