Talk:Bomba Patch

Did you know nomination

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 11:50, 13 September 2023 (UTC)

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• ... that video game mod Bomba Patch's name (logo pictured) was taken from éclairs? Source: [1] "[...] the tournament's grand prize was a chocolate éclair [nominator's note: Chocolate éclairs are known as "bombas de chocolate" in Brazil] [...] In the following editions, he invested in other more modern prizes, such as a Discman, but the name that was already on people's lips was the Bomba Cup - which ended up being the origin of the name Bomba Patch."
  • ALT1: ... that video game mod Bomba Patch's theme song (logo pictured) was inspired by a priest? Source: [2] Allan began to think of a song to rock the mod's success. That's when he remembered the song that the town priest had played on the sound system (...) The verses inspired Allan who, together with a group specializing in political jingles, composed the funk that would become one of the most iconic songs in the Brazilian gamer scene.
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Created by Skyshifter (talk). Self-nominated at 20:32, 7 September 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Bomba Patch; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

• Interesting hook and the information regarding it is also stated according to the machine translation of the Portuguese article on the hook. Toadboy123 (talk) 02:12, 10 September 2023 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Bomba Patch/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:25, 28 October 2023 (UTC)

Comments to follow soon. ♦ jaguar 18:25, 28 October 2023 (UTC)

• "Eventually, the mod became nationally known" - perhaps this reads better as The mod became popular nationwide.
  • Fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• " He stopped working on Bomba Patch" - Jefferson
  • Fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "and Jefferson created social media for it" - reads sloppy, he created social media accounts?
  • Yes; fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "Several publications recognize Bomba Patch's impact and legacy in Brazil." - can this be expanded? What did people enjoy about the mods?
  • It's in the impact and legacy section. The sources praised the game for many different aspects, so I'm not sure how to summarize it without it being too long. Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)

  Added Skyshifter ^talk 21:12, 30 October 2023 (UTC)

• "for PlayStation," - missing 'the'
  • Fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "using mod "Brazucas"" - again, missing 'the'
  • Fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "He initially changed the foreign teams for Brazilian ones" - replaced the foreign teams with Brazilian ones
  • Fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "However, the uniform and shield were still the same" - should this not be 'emblem'? And I'd rephrase to However, the team's uniforms and emblems were left unaltered
  • Fixed and rephrased Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "He then edited in clubs from the Campeonato Brasileiro Série A and Série B." - overuse of 'he', replace with his surname
  • Fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "Jefferson reports that even in the second championship, " - wrong tense
  • Fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "Jefferson also allowed participants in the championship to take the mod home" - you mean he gave away the mod's source code?
  • In the PS2 era this mod was usually sold as physical discs. The source also implies that (translated: One of these participants took a copy of Bomba Patch to a store in the city and exchanged it for another game). Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• " One of them, however, took a copy of the mod to a store in the city, one of whose shopkeepers was in business with a large street market in another city" - this reads poorly and needs to be rephrased
  • I'm really bad with prose, but I tried to make it better. Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)
• "While its main platform is still PlayStation 2" - missing 'the'
  • Fixed Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)

There are a few prose issues, but I'll leave this on hold and will review it again once all of the above have been clarified. ♦ jaguar 19:45, 28 October 2023 (UTC)

@Jaguar: thank you for reviewing the article! I've responded to everything so far. Indeed I am not very good with prose, but hopefully everything can be sorted out by the end of the review. I can also help clarify some Portuguese sources if needed. Skyshifter ^talk 00:47, 29 October 2023 (UTC)

Thank you, Skyshifter. I made a couple of copyedits but this looks good to go now. Well done! ♦ jaguar 23:02, 30 October 2023 (UTC)