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A Confederate unit that did not see major combat, but surprisingly well documented and a snapshot into the daily life of the ordinary Civil War soldier. Kges1901 (talk) 04:29, 10 July 2022 (UTC)
Comments I'll review this a section at a time, lede last.
Organization and Pensacola Service
The first para is jumbled and needs a rewrite. I recommend it follow these points:
1) Give the pre-regimental constituent units first.
2) Then date for actual foundation of the regiment. And mention specific units serving on detached duty, please. As written, their names are uncertain.
3) Give candidates' "qualifications" before vote. And how many regimental officers were there anyhow? All elected?
4) I do not understand why Bragg's troop totals have any bearing on regimental organization. If it is germane, please show its relevance, and find a suitable location for the info.
You have great info here in mostly well-written sentences. However, sentence order is scrambled. A better chronology would help.Georgejdorner (talk) 23:32, 29 July 2022 (UTC)
Second para:
Two sentences should be reversed. Coltart banned gambling and insisted on barracks cleanup; then he became unpopular. And, please clarify, is Coltart second in command of the regiment?Georgejdorner (talk) 23:44, 29 July 2022 (UTC)
Time for a break.Georgejdorner (talk) 23:44, 29 July 2022 (UTC)
The remaining paras of this section are nicely written. I question only the jammed propeller on the steamship. How did the ship escape? Repaired propeller? Kedging? Auxiliary sails?Georgejdorner (talk) 19:04, 30 July 2022 (UTC)
Bibliography As I have no access to the sources, I must assume good faith. I would note that this is an extensive listing, given the narrow Scope of the subject.Georgejdorner (talk) 03:18, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
Toolbox External links: In Search of...General William Henry Carroll is a dead link.
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Lede
I am unfamiliar with Civil War notability standards, but 7th Alabama seems to have an inconsequential history. I think some version of your nominating statement above as you second sentence would make the unit more important and thus more notable to the reader.
Also, by merely deeming Coltart unpopular, you scant the reasons for that unpopularity. Just a mention that he was a disciplinarian would do.Georgejdorner (talk) 04:22, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
Overall I would recommend extending the text to place 7th Alabama in the context of their superior units and theater of operations. There's an ambiguous reference to Bragg. Did he need the 7th for the added manpower for his operations? Etc.Georgejdorner (talk) 04:32, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
Unsolicited personal opinion from an ex-professional soldier:
Clean healthy barracks? No drunken gambling in said barracks? How dare he! The only mistake of Coltart's I can see, he did not order his lieutenants to order his sergeants to supervise duties instead of personally issuing orders.
And troops resentful of a sergeant in charge of a detail? Those are troops looking for a chance to desert.Georgejdorner (talk) 04:45, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
- Hey Kges can you have a look in George's comments? Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 13:42, 24 September 2022 (UTC)