Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 March 15
Another fairly extensive re-write, was listed as having multiple problems and looked like this:
http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=List_of_Scream_characters&diff=415028533&oldid=414986817
Now looks like this:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_Scream_characters
Have added the entire intro that is present and the cast picture, rewritten every bio to read less in-universe, added sources (I am aware it needs more) and I deleted the Scream 4 section entirely as it just seemed like casting call information and wasn't detailed or notable enough to be there just yet. Hopeful to hear your thoughts :D Darkwarriorblake (talk) 00:47, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Darkwarriorblake (talk) 00:47, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
BernardPascal (talk) 07:04, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Review needed for TV series episode list
BarryMieny (talk) 07:13, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
User:Lukeja/Alec Finlay
[edit]Article on Alec Finlay, a British artist, recently shortlisted for the northern art prize.
Lukeja (talk) 10:40, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Is this sufficient info to place on wiki?
TomPiano1986 (talk) 11:17, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
In the article communities are briefly described. A concept of social capital is suggested as a way to evaluate Internet impact on communities. A concept of social capital, evaluation criteria and it’s effects on communities are briefly described Internet usage affects on offline and online communities are discussed.
Scrascra (talk) 13:09, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Ready for feedback. Thanks.
EA1Baker (talk) 13:17, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Please note if this is sufficient information about Opportunity Crudes.
Prhpco (talk) 14:51, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
I have written this new article about an experimental filmmaker (who is garnering some international attention). Can someone give me some feedback! This is my first article :)
Lux vivens (talk) 15:20, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
- I fixed some referencing problems. Sometime you should review how to link to Wikipedia articles (using "Wikilinks", which are pairs of double brackets"[[" around the article title). In some cases you actually had two references, so look at how I re-did the references. Do you REALLY need the "AKA"? In the body of the article you should be making references to "reliable sources". IMDB is explicitly called not-reliable. IMDB is usually cited only in "External links". Because you really aren't using it for anything of substance, I didn't touch it, but you should know... Articles about the kind of artist represented by your subject frequently lead to disagreements over "notability", so review WP:GNG. The Saatchi article is possibly helpful in this regard, but the other references, although important to keep, are not as useful for this purpose. What would be helpful, if it exists, is an article discussing your subject and her work in some kind of review-like depth, not as a simple biographical blurb. Any mentions in "mainstream" media are helpful. Tkotc (talk) 00:22, 17 March 2011 (UTC)
User:NaazKhan86/Faraaz Kazi I need to post this but can't seem to. Please help.
[edit]NaazKhan86 (talk) 15:32, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
I welcome suggestions and editing remarks on this article.
Thank you.
Gpogrowski (talk) 17:14, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
- I fixed the sentence beginning the article, and also fixed the two references. I don't think that date should be in bold. Do you have her date of birth? The big problem, though, is the lack of references naming your subject and describing her work. The two references you use merely describe an entity and do not mention your subject herself. You need such references for your article to survive. Tkotc (talk) 22:24, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
"I will..." (talk) 20:08, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
I was doing some research on antibodies and found the Wikipedia article on the subject. The Wikipedia article contained a reference to Dr. John L. Fahey, who discovered IgD in 1964 with a fellow researcher at NIH. The reference to Dr. Fahey had a red link, so I created this brief biography page. I am his son, but I believe the page is neutral: it only states the facts, is focused entirely on his research career, and avoids grand claims and superlatives. I have also provided references both within Wikipedia and through external web sources. My questions:
1. Have I succeeded in remaining neutral? 2. Do I need more print media references?
Any other comments/suggestions are welcome. Thank you!
JLFahey (talk) 20:43, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Would someone mind reviewing this new article, please? And I'd appreciate feedback, if you have any tips.
Thanks,