Template:Did you know nominations/Sue Austin
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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:55, 16 March 2016 (UTC)
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Sue Austin
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Sue Austin via video at TedX Monterrey
[[File:|120x133px|Sue Austin's Portal in a swimming pool ]]
Sue Austin's Portal in a swimming pool
- ... that Sue Austin (pictured) created performance art using a specially modified wheelchair to move underwater with scuba diving equipment as part of the London 2012 Cultural Olympiad?
- Reviewed: No Land's Song
- Comment: I believe The OTRS is pending for [[:]], so I guess we'll see what position we're in at the end of the review. I think it's a much better photo than the portrait!
Created by JTdisabilityartsonline (talk). Nominated by Jolly Janner (talk) at 08:19, 10 March 2016 (UTC).
Created on March 3, nom on March 10/new enough. 3074 char/long enough. Neutral. Cited. No apparent copyvios. Hook, under maximum. Cited by BBC. QPQ done. Portrait is PD. Portal photo says "permission for this file has been sent in accordance with Commons:OTRS", thus believe is also acceptable for use and like nominator think it is a much better lead image. My only issue is with the wording of the hook. She does performance art. Artwork, typically refers to two-dimensional material prepared for publication or reproduction (I looked it up in 3 dictionaries to make sure I wasn't being obtuse). But, we also have verb disagreement "creates" and "was performed", which are different tenses and read awkwardly. Could you reword the hook, maybe flipping the order and tightening it up a bit? Something like "who performed as part of ... Great article! Thanks for nominating it and sharing it with the rest of us Jolly Janner SusunW (talk) 22:00, 11 March 2016 (UTC)
- Jolly Janner unsure if this pinged you before as have had no response. SusunW (talk) 23:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)
- SusunW. Thank you for your review, it has been most helpful, as wording hooks isn't one of my strengths. I have given it a go. Jolly Ω Janner 06:12, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
Jolly Janner That works, or it could be tweaked a little and worded as :::::ALT1 ...that Sue Austin, who performed as part of the London 2012 Cultural Olympiad, uses an underwater wheelchair specially modified with scuba diving equipment (pictured)? GTG SusunW (talk) 16:03, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- Like that, - how about using the second image and move (pictured)? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:38, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- We definitely all agree that the second image is preferred. Where would you put pictured Gerda Arendt? SusunW (talk) 16:47, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- Just before the "?" --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:50, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- We definitely all agree that the second image is preferred. Where would you put pictured Gerda Arendt? SusunW (talk) 16:47, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- Like that, - how about using the second image and move (pictured)? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:38, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- SusunW. Thank you for your review, it has been most helpful, as wording hooks isn't one of my strengths. I have given it a go. Jolly Ω Janner 06:12, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
- Jolly Janner unsure if this pinged you before as have had no response. SusunW (talk) 23:37, 14 March 2016 (UTC)
