Template:Did you know nominations/Carlos Jenkins

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 ^talk 08:50, 12 October 2012 (UTC)

Carlos Jenkins

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~~... that American football linebacker Carlos Jenkins reportedly survived a motorcycle accident at seventy miles an hour while not wearing a helmet?~~

Reviewed: Fred Young (director)

Created/expanded by Guoguo12 (talk). Self nom at 04:13, 26 September 2012 (UTC)

Comment: Admittedly, there is almost certainly a better way to phrase the hook. Any help would be appreciated. Guoguo12 (Talk) 04:25, 26 September 2012 (UTC)

ALT1: ... that American football linebacker Carlos Jenkins reportedly survived a motorcycle accident at seventy miles an hour despite not wearing a helmet? (Fiddle Faddle (talk) 15:17, 3 October 2012 (UTC))
Yes! That sounds much better. Thanks, Guoguo12 (Talk) 19:01, 3 October 2012 (UTC).

ALT2: ... that American football linebacker Carlos Jenkins reportedly survived a motorcycle accident at 70 MPH without wearing a helmet?
ALT2-a: ... that American football linebacker Carlos Jenkins reportedly survived a motorcycle accident without wearing a helmet?

People outside U.S. may understand what MPH means; I wonder if speed is needed. --George Ho (talk) 14:01, 5 October 2012 (UTC)

It might be more interesting with the speed included, though. Guoguo12 (Talk) 20:46, 6 October 2012 (UTC)

The speed is essential. Folk might think he fell off it while it was stationary! Fiddle Faddle (talk) 21:08, 6 October 2012 (UTC)

  Hook checks out. Expanded 5x times from stub to start (approx 225 to 1780) Would suuggest 70 miles per hour Djflem (talk) 21:07, 11 October 2012 (UTC)

Agreed. Miles per hour. Guoguo12 (Talk) 22:13, 11 October 2012 (UTC)

That would make the hook one of the following (can't tell whether "despite not" or "without" was preferred):

ALT1 rev: ... that American football linebacker Carlos Jenkins reportedly survived a motorcycle accident at 70 miles per hour despite not wearing a helmet?
ALT2 rev: ... that American football linebacker Carlos Jenkins reportedly survived a motorcycle accident at 70 miles per hour without wearing a helmet?

Note: have struck the earlier hooks for clarity. —BlueMoonset (talk) 00:37, 12 October 2012 (UTC)