Talk:Tropical Storm Julia (2016)

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"This article is about the tropical storm in 2016. For the Category 4 hurricane in 2010, see Hurricane Julia." why the hatnote? See WP:NAMB; the title isn't ambigous. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Don't ask me, I didn't add that :P --12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"shortly before strengthening further to reach maximum sustained winds of 50 mph (85 km/h)" link to maximum sustained winds. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Done--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Either chose to mention state names in cities or don't. I personally don't but please be consistent. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Why a source in the lead? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Because I didn't mention the overall damage total later (so no citation later in the article). But maybe I should include that info in the impact--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"A tropical wave embedded in a Saharan Air Layer (SAL) emerged into the Atlantic Ocean from the west coast on September 1." any reason SAL is abbreviated? And how can a storm be in a "SAL"? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Ok, you made me open the TCR and it mentioned nothing about SAL. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  - I'll remove the SAL part since the TCR doesn't mention it, and I highly doubt a TWO would--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    - You still mentioned something about "Saharan Air" though. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:38, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Why is thunderstorms linked in the MH? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"The National Hurricane Center did not begin monitoring the system until it developed into a broad area of low pressure associated with a concentrated area of thunderstorms about 350 mi (560 km) east of the Leeward Islands on September 8." this can easily be shortened to "The National Hurricane Center did not begin monitoring the system until a concentrated area of low pressure developed about 350 mi (560 km) east of the Leeward Islands on September 8." Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"The convection quickly diminished soon thereafter, and as the system tracked to the west-northwest into the southwestern Atlantic," "soon" is on the words to watch and is probably redundant to "thereafter" and "quickly", so I think it can be axed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

" it was nearly dropped from the NHC's outlook," not back up by source. And could you link to TWO somewhere (maybe add it to Glossary of tropical cyclone terms? And you don't abbreviate the NHC here. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"However, as it passed close to the coast of Florida, it quickly organized and developed more thunderstorm activity and a surface circulation." you already said a LPA area formed, so mentioning it here is redundant. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

". However, as it passed close to the coast of Florida, it quickly organized and developed more thunderstorm activity. It is estimated that a tropical depression formed at 06:00 UTC on September 13 while just offshore. It made landfall in Jensen Beach, Florida, around that time." You mentioned it four times in a row. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:38, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

" It made landfall in Jensen Beach, Florida at the same time. A strong band of deep convection soon formed in the northeast quadrant of the cyclone, though westerly wind shear prevented any significant convection from developing on the western side of the storm.[2]" could you add a transition word somewhere here? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

You mentioned it was offshore when it formed yet you backpedel in the next sentence by saying it made landfall at about the time it was classified. The TCR suggests it made landfall at the exact time of classification, so you should mention that. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 03:38, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"At 03:00 UTC on September 14, the National Hurricane Center (NHC) initiated advisories on Julia – which was then centered near Jacksonville – and initially predicted that the storm would move north-northwestward and become extratropical or a remnant low pressure area over Georgia by September 16" why is the NHC linked and spelled out here of all places? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"However, the bursts of convection were short-lived as wind shear removed the convection well away from the center, exposing the storm's circulation, which became slightly further elongated." ok, two things here. First it's redundant to say wind shear removed convection from the center and the center became exposed and second the elongated bit can be used as an adjective. I'd personally write it as "However, these bursts were short-lived due to strong wind shear, causing its elongated circulation to become far removed from the deep convection." Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"day, Julia attained its minimum barometric pressure of 1,007 mbar (29.7 inHg).[2]" put {{convert|1007|mbar|inHg|abbr=on|comma=off}} to avoid the comma problem here I've brought up in the past. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Wind shear again exposed the circulation late on September 15 as the cyclone drifted south-southeastwards, although Julia maintained tropical storm status due to periodic bursts of convection that continued to occur to the east of the center.[7][8]" you basically already mention this. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Julia consisted of mainly a low-level swirl of clouds by late on September 16; however, minimal convection kept the storm at the minimal requirements for a tropical cyclone. Early on September 17, Julia weakened to a tropical depression.[2] As the cyclone continued to deteriorate throughout the day, NHC forecaster Lixion Avila indicated that he could either "classify [Julia] as a remnant low and terminate advisories" or "keep Julia as a tropical depression in this advisory given that there was deep convection associated with the center only a few hours ago."[10] " I'd axe the second sentence since it's redundant to the first. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Removed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"after being devoid of convection for nearly twelve hours.[11]" why is 12 spelled out? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Additionally, flash flood watches were issued" a link would be nice. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"School district officials in the coastal counties of Georgia and South Carolina monitored the progress of the storm, though school remained opened.[13]" not sure this is worth noting when school itself wasn't closed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I guess not--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"EF0" a link here would be nice for casual readers. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

" Flooding rain impacted the Space Coast and the First Coast, with 3.3 in (84 mm) of precipitation reported in Melbourne,[15] inundating low-lying and typically flood-prone areas.[14]" the first and last bits are redundant. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"As the remnants of Julia interacted with a cold front near the coastline" link to front (meteorology) here. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

There is an article specifically for cold fronts--12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"On September 22, Governor Pat McCrory declared a state of emergency for Bertie, " probably should note he's no longer the governor. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Roy Cooper is now :) :P --12george1 (talk) 03:11, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"became available for homeowners needing to repair their properties." to "became available for needy homeowners." Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 02:32, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]