Talk:Thanksgiving (Family Guy)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ebe123 (talk · contribs) 11:56, 1 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"The episode follows the Griffin family, and several of their neighbors, as they celebrate the Thanksgiving holiday. As they sit down for dinner, they are shocked to see that their neighbors Joe and Bonnie Swanson's son has suddenly returned, after having originally thought that he had died in the Iraq War." so after the first sentence, it is not flowing as well as other sentences.
- Done. Gage (talk) 08:29, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - It isn't fixed. I think that it should be in a different paragraph. ~~Ebe123~~ → report on my contribs. 10:39, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    - Can you give an example of what you'd like to see done? Gage (talk) 03:15, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      - "The episode follows the Griffin family, and several of their neighbors, as they celebrate the Thanksgiving holiday.

- - - - As they sit down for dinner, they are shocked to see that Kevin Swanson, son of Joe and Bonnie Swanson, has returned from Iraq."
You want the lead to be split into two paragraphs? I strongly oppose that suggestion, as it has never been a requirement of any of the other GAs that have done, or even the FAC I got promoted. Please do not fail the article based on this one point. Everything else is fine, in my opinion. Gage (talk) 14:33, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Well, it was just a suggestion so I would of not failed this based on 1 point.

I feel like Kevin McFarland's review is getting too much weight on it, while that the positive review is considerably smaller.
- Done. Gage (talk) 08:29, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Found nothing else, putting on hold (7 days). ~~Ebe123~~ → report on my contribs. 20:49, 1 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

Pass. Good job for the article. ~~Ebe123~~ → report on my contribs. 16:00, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]