Talk:Subaru Sumeragi/GA1
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Reviewer: Link20XX (talk · contribs) 18:52, 23 December 2020 (UTC)
Hello. Per our agreement, I will be reviewing this article. This is my first GA review, so if I mess up somehow please have mercy. Anyway, I won't be able to start until after Christmas. I look forward to reviewing the article. Link20XX (talk) 18:52, 23 December 2020 (UTC)
@Link20XX: Thanks. Just remember the ping feature or mention to add a link other editors when elaborating on certain comments.Tintor2 (talk) 19:46, 23 December 2020 (UTC)
@Tintor2: I have completed my initial review. Great job with the article, just a few critiques are needed. I made some small changes for you.
Lead:
- Who is Hokuto? Some clarification on that in the lead would be helpful, maybe phrase it something like, "living with his twin sister, Hokuto Sumeragi ..."
- Done.
Creation and Development:
- In casting, make the one with the VA for the X show a bit more obvious its the show, like "In the X TV series, ..."
- Fixed
Reception:
- The 2nd review is from Mania Entertainment, so saying "from the same site" is incorrect and should be corrected to say "from Mania Entertainment" or something like that.
- Thanks for the correction. Revised
Changes over multiple sections:
- Sometimes Seishiro is spelled as Seishirō. Making the spelling consistent throughout the entire article would be nice
- Revised
- Seishiro seems like an important character to Subaru, so linking the article on Seishiro in other sections his name appears would be helpful
- Relink
Once you have revised the article, ping me again and I will pass it. Great job on the article. Link20XX (talk) 17:52, 26 December 2020 (UTC) @Link20XX: Thanks for the review. I hope every change I made is okay.Tintor2 (talk) 18:15, 26 December 2020 (UTC)
@Tintor2: The changes you made are enough. The article passes the review and is now a GA. Nice work and congratulations! Link20XX (talk) 18:26, 26 December 2020 (UTC)