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B-class

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Passed for WP:POLAND. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 03:42, 31 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Yash! (talk · contribs) 10:19, 4 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I will start tomorrow. Thanks! — Yash! [talk] 10:19, 4 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • Link Poland
    • Please reconsider. Per WP:OVERLINK, "the names of major geographic features and locations" should not be linked "unless they are particularly relevant to the topic of the article". Poland is neither particularly obscure, nor directly relevant to the topic. In general, I avoid linking the names of existing countries, but do link the names of historical political entities (such as Polish-Lithuanian Commonwealth, Duchy of Warsaw, Kingdom of Prussia). I don't think that reading about modern-day Poland will help the reader much in understanding the life and work of Paul Tremo. Please also note that I have linked Polish cuisine (but not Poland, nor cuisine), per WP:SPECIFICLINK. — Kpalion(talk) 12:25, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      • I was referring to 'Polish-Lithuanian Commonwealth' in 'King Stanislaus Augustus Poniatowski of Poland.' It has been linked once in the prose. One link in the lead won't be overlinking. It is fine either way. I am satisfied with your work. Passing it :) — Yash! [talk] 14:48, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Life

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  • his wife, - no need to mention that
    • Please reconsider. In Tremo's times it was (and to many people, still is) a pretty big deal whether someone was born in or out of wedlock, so I believe that the verifiable information that his parents were married to each other shouldn't be left out. — Kpalion(talk) 12:25, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Prussian capital - What was Prussian capital? Better to write the actual name
  • Elie Tremeau, both father and son - Better to write 'Both Elie Tremeau, his father and grandfather' or something else that you like that mentions 'father and grandfather' since the article is on Tremo
  • were then - were
  • His status is - His status was
    • I've reworded the sentence to make it clearer that it's about modern historians, not Tremo's contemporaries, that infer his status as the king's favourite cook from his salary. — Kpalion(talk) 08:39, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Please be consistent. He is referred as 'Paul' and 'Tremo' in the section. Use 'Tremo' throughout
    • Using the surname only might be confusing in those sentences that mention both Paul Tremo and his brother, Jacques Tremo. But I've changed most instances of 'Paul' to 'Paul Tremo'. — Kpalion(talk) 22:38, 5 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Work

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References

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  • In 1762, Paul Tremo landed a job as... - Just to be sure, is everything stated in the following few sentences covered by a single source?
    • Yes. Actually, as you may have noticed, this entire section is based on (various pages of) a single source. If you think that any particular statement should have a separate inline citation, please mark it with a 'citation needed' tag and I will replace it with a citation. — Kpalion(talk) 12:25, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Images

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I will take another look once the changes have been made. Bon appétit ;) — Yash! [talk] 01:40, 5 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]