Talk:Optonica

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A good start

This is an good start for what could be an excellent article. But it has a few problems.

no cites. It mentions sources, but it's unclear what's coming from where.
it offers too many unattributed opinions. Wikipedia doesn't declare what's remarkable or beautiful. It states facts and leaves the opinions to others.
the tone is just a bit too much like an essay of personal observations
it overreaches in deciding what motivated Sharp, and what the legacy of Optonica is. Again, this is not for Wikipedia to decide.
it uses weasel words, like "probably" and "considered"

--Escape Orbit ^(Talk) 22:21, 5 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Main reference

A reference is obviously needed for Optonica sales catalogue OP-FB 10/77
--Brenont (talk) 22:55, 31 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]