Talk:Odin Sphere/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:55, 27 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get this done soon. JAGUAR 20:55, 27 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

for the PlayStation 2 home console" - 'home console' is redundant
"The story was based around the concept of a Valkyrie princess" - can Valkyrie be linked to something or is it strictly in-game lore?
"First announced in February 2007, the team had encountered difficulties finding a publisher due to Kamitani's sparse record as a game developer. Atlus picked up the title, but it was delayed into 2007" - doesn't seem like much of a delay given it was announced in the same year?
"All physical attack drain a character's POW gauge" - not important, but does POW stand for anything? It could prove useful for unfamiliar readers
"who ruled the kingdom bearing his name" - should 'kingdom' be capitalised here? It is later on
"but later became a spiritual successor" - link spiritual successor
"Odin Sphere was first revealed in February 2007, three months prior to release.[37] While the game was completed in 2006, Atlus delayed its release into 2007 as they did not want it to cannibalize the market for their other titles, particularly Persona 3" - I think these two sentences would make better sense if they were switched around: While the game was completed in 2006, Atlus delayed its release into 2007 as they did not want it to cannibalize the market for their other titles, particularly Persona 3. Odin Sphere was first revealed in February 2007, three months prior to release.
"where the game won Best Artistic Design,[93] Best Story,[94] Most Innovative Design,[95] and Best RPG." - the awards should be in quotations
No dead links

Excellent work with this one! I'll leave this on hold until the minor issues are out of the way. JAGUAR 15:59, 29 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: Done my best to address all your concerns. --ProtoDrake (talk) 16:41, 29 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

JAGUAR 09:35, 30 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]