Talk:Million Eyes/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 12:29, 22 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Songwriting credits have a discrepancy, see on the section Background and composition.

Check below.

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Lead

Written by Amy Morrey and Nottet and produced by Luuk Cox → See below

See answer below.

the track acts → the track was chosen as
lead single for → lead single of
Music critics → link to music journalism
Some information might need to be removed due to Celebmix.

See answer below

All Done

Background and composition

Five references in a row it is too much. Start by removing Celebmix (explained below) and the maximum should be three in a row, otherwise just cite each one. Example: dark[1], electropop[2] power ballad[3] and so on

I tried to fix the massive amounts of sources.

You should use the inlay notes of the album and not Hung Medien. On top of that there is some discrepancy between the credits in the songwriting.

I now used the album credits. These are the credits as listed on Selfocracy, and I don't quite know what you mean with "discrepancy".

Luuk Cox is credited for songwriting on the song per Hung Medien. On top of this the article is missing a credits and personnel section. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 01:09, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

What Cox is credited for is "music", but that doesn't count as songwriting. I've added a Credits and personnel section now. Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:32, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

in various countries → see below on release history.
however, another decision was made "at the last minute", as he felt "Million Eyes" would appeal more to listeners → instead, "Million Eyes" was picked "at the last minute", as Nottet felt it would appeal more to listeners. Any other sentence would be good, I don't like the flow of "however, another decision" it's just repetition of the same idea.
During the song's refrain, Nottet sings → where are you going with this? Some critic made a point regarding the chorus?

I just gave some lyrics, which are backed by the source given. I've seen this in many different articles, and I guess it's not that unimportant since it's the chorus.

I will accept since it's also part of the sample. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:35, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

In the last sentence the same happens with four sources in a row.

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Reception

Moustique's Lorfèvre → Moustique's Luc Lorfèvre (first time using his name so use his first and last name)
Jonathan Currinn of CelebMix → the information regarding this website needs to be removed as it is not a reliable source, writers are not paid and anyone can write stuff there once applied.

Stuff written by Currinn is definitely reliable since Currinn is a certified critic with a degree. I already had this discussion in one of my GANs; I can link you to the thread if you want to.

Please do so. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 14:10, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"Million Eyes" was named the best song of 2016 by Wiwibloggs, and was nominated in the Hit of the Year category at the 2017 D6bels Music Awards. → should be on the first paragraph

I just felt that it did not flow well in the first para, which is ending with a negative review. Also, an accolade isn't exactly a review (which the first para consists of 100%). I can change it though, if you want me to.

But an accolade it isn't exactly chart performance. It is fine if it ends with a negative review. I have done it a couple of times.

I was apprehensive regarding the wiwiblogs, but after a closer analysis, it is a legit website as it has been featured on CNN, New York Times, Newsweek among others.

Indeed

on record charts after its release. → on some record charts after its release.
It had originally peaked at number nine in December 2016 → what do you mean? It was re-released after its first peak?

I want to say that that was the song's original peak before it dropped down and climbed up again to a higher peak. Should I word this differently?

Yes you should. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 14:10, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: I've worked on the issue and removed the latter altogether, as it wasn't that important actually. Cartoon network freak (talk) 14:24, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Reliable_sources/Noticeboard/Archive_239#Celeb_Mix_and_Direct_Lyrics Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:51, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:28, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

All Done

Music video

on 27 October 2016,[28] → you don't need the youtube source here, it's already on RTBF
" It was shot by Zeb Daemen of Caviar Productions." → Information on CelebMix needs to be removed and replaced by a reliable source

See above for CelebMix's reliable status.

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Done.

Live performances

In December, the singer performed on the seventh season of Danse avec les stars on 16 December 2016, → repetition remove the first December

He also sang "Million Eyes" on Madmoizelle Music, and Virgin Radio → In the same month he also sang "Million Eyes" on Madmoizelle Music and Virgin Radio

worded slightly different

for Le Grand Studio RTL → as well as for Le Grand Studio RTL
and The Voice → remove the "and"
It would be nice to have other sources replacing the Youtube ones, but I know it isn't easy.

I don't quite think this is needed since the videos were released via the channel of the respective TV show/radio station. That's just my opinion.

Sure, but we never know when if the videos are going to ling around forever. But it is fine.

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Track listing

Use {{spaced ndash}}

Done

Charts

Fine

Certifications

Fine

Release history

Add another two/three sources to prove that was released in several countries.

Done

References

Fine

Overall

No other credits? Engineers, mixing...

These were the only credits they listed on Selfocracy.

Done

Let me know when you finish the changes. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 14:16, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Hi and thank you very much for your review! These are my comments. Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 23:20, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Addressed. Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:36, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Wow, I'm very glad you passed this article as the song is very personal to me and I put a lot of work into the article. This may sound weird, but is there any chance you could also get to Selfocracy? If that was promoted as well, I would be able to nominate the whole topic for GA. Anway, just disregard this if you're too busy. Wish you a Merry Christmas! Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:25, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: I'm in the middle of reviewing a couple of articles, on top of that I'm improving Mars' article and other stuff in my life. Not much time to spare, later down the road I might take a look l but I'm sure someone will get to it before. It's ok to ask as well. Happy Holidays! MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:29, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]