Talk:Mandeep Dhillon

Did you know nomination

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Amkgp (talk) 14:43, 17 August 2020 (UTC)

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• ... that Mandeep Dhillon was in The City and the City before After Life and after Life on the Road? Source: The years of these roles were 2018 (Radio Times); 2019 (Wonderland); and 2016 (Metro)
  • ALT1:... that Mandeep Dhillon was offered a role by Ricky Gervais after telling him that she was scared by his character? Source: Metro

• Reviewed: Hello, Sister! (1933 film)

5x expanded by BennyOnTheLoose (talk). Self-nominated at 18:13, 8 August 2020 (UTC).

Interesting career, with fine reception details, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Striking tthe original which works only for people who know at least one. The ALT has little quirkiness for everyone. I linked film again - the lead is long ago at that point, and made on "he" a "she" - is that right? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:42, 10 August 2020 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Mandeep Dhillon/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Bait30 (talk · contribs) 17:40, 5 March 2021 (UTC)

I'll try to get started on this review soon. I'll review prose first going down the page by section, then do images, then do references last.  Bait30  ^{Talk 2 me pls?} 17:40, 5 March 2021 (UTC)

Lead

• "In 2012 she had a leading role": I've noticed that throughout the article, when a sentence begins "In YEAR", it's sometimes followed by a comma and it sometimes isn't. I'm not sure if without a comma is done in some variety of English that's not American English, but at least try to make it consistent. (1a)
  • Amended. (Also slightly reworded a couple of instances so that not so many sentences start with "In 20xx ...") BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 03:01, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Early life

• The first sentences of each paragraph, are kinda wordy and complex (lots of dependent clauses). It is grammatical and understandable though so I won't hold it against you if you choose to keep it haha.
  • I've broken one of them up - very happy to hear any further suggestions.

Career

• "In 2011": the comma thing again. (1a)
  • Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 03:18, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
• "The Financial Times': The "The" shouldn't be italicized. (1a)
  • Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 03:18, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
• "at the behest of her family who want her": I believe it should be "family who wants". Unless again it might be an WP:ENGVAR thing. (1a)
  • Looks like there is a difference between American and British English around collective nouns. I've added the word "members" but happy to revisit. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 03:18, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Ok, yeah I sort of remember hearing something about that but I wasn't sure. In that case, it's fine to keep as is.  Bait30  ^{Talk 2 me pls?} 03:35, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
• "In the show...UI Qoma": these two sentences seem to be extraneous. (3b)
  • Removed. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 03:18, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
• Instead of "(2019 to 2020)", shouldn't it be "(2019–present)"?
  • Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 03:18, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Filmography

• Nothing that would affect the GA review, but per WP:FILMOGRAPHY, you should use "Title" in your tables instead of "Film" and "Programme".
  • Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 02:52, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Images

• I feel like the Bush Theatre image is in the gray area between relevant and irrelevant. It's a picture of the place she worked at from 6 years before she worked there. (6b)

 Bait30  ^{Talk 2 me pls?} 22:58, 5 March 2021 (UTC)

• • Fair point. Should this be removed? BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 03:19, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
    • In my opinion, yeah.  Bait30  ^{Talk 2 me pls?} 03:35, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

References

Reference numbers come from this version of the article.

• Ref 1: dead. Also how can the tweet be from 2004? Twitter was founded in 2006. (2b)
  • Added an archive url, and corrected my typos in the year here and in the hidden comment "tweet confirms day of birth; ES article states that Dhillon was 27 (in April 2020)" BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 03:34, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

GA checklist

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

 Bait30  ^{Talk 2 me pls?} 23:45, 5 March 2021 (UTC) Looks good now!  Bait30  ^{Talk 2 me pls?} 05:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Many thanks for taking the review on and for your constructive comments, Bait30. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:39, 6 March 2021 (UTC)