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GA Review

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Reviewer: Bait30 (talk · contribs) 17:40, 5 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'll try to get started on this review soon. I'll review prose first going down the page by section, then do images, then do references last.  Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 17:40, 5 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • "In 2012 she had a leading role": I've noticed that throughout the article, when a sentence begins "In YEAR", it's sometimes followed by a comma and it sometimes isn't. I'm not sure if without a comma is done in some variety of English that's not American English, but at least try to make it consistent. (1a)

Early life

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  • The first sentences of each paragraph, are kinda wordy and complex (lots of dependent clauses). It is grammatical and understandable though so I won't hold it against you if you choose to keep it haha.
    • I've broken one of them up - very happy to hear any further suggestions.

Career

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Filmography

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Images

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  • I feel like the Bush Theatre image is in the gray area between relevant and irrelevant. It's a picture of the place she worked at from 6 years before she worked there. (6b)

 Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 22:58, 5 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

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Reference numbers come from this version of the article.

  • Ref 1: dead. Also how can the tweet be from 2004? Twitter was founded in 2006. (2b)

GA checklist

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

 Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 23:45, 5 March 2021 (UTC) Looks good now!  Bait30  Talk 2 me pls? 05:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]