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Good articleLost in the World has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
December 28, 2011Good article nomineeNot listed
January 22, 2012Good article nomineeNot listed
February 6, 2012Good article nomineeNot listed
July 26, 2012Good article nomineeListed
Current status: Good article

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 18:32, 7 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox
  • The "length" section needs a {{duration}} template
Done.
Lead

""Lost in the World" was initially released on September 29" ---> September 29 what?

Added year.
  • "and was over 6 minutes long," ---> what's the exact duration?
Added specific time length.
  • Too many instances with "The song", change it up
Changed some to track, "Lost in the World", etc.
Background
  • "Later, however, in October 2010, it was confirmed that the "Lost in the World" would appear on West's fifth studio album, but that the leaked version had subsequently been split into two different songs." ---> remove "the" between "that" and "lost". Also remove "however" between "later" and "in".
Done.
  • Is it really necessary to link Hawaii?
Done.
  • "and that he was to feature on "Lost in the World". " ---> feature to be what?
Specified.
Composition
  • ""Lost in the World" is 4 minutes, 16 seconds long" ---> remove the coma and add "and".
  • Delink Bon Iver
  • "Measured" is linked however, what about chorus and tempo?
Done.
Reviews
  • Fix this "[24] <"
  • I noticed that some of the descriptions directly derived from the reviews. Unless they are in quotations, it needs to be restated in your own words. Otherwise, it's plagiarism.
Done.
Music video
  • Why is YouTube linked?
Done.
Life performances
  • "To promote his new album," ---> "To promote My Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy,"
Done.
  • "During the performance, West wore black peacoat, fur vest, shiny gold shirt, gold chains, and headband." --> source?
Added.
  • Link lip-syncing
  • Delink booed
Done.

"The booing garnered press coverage" ---> explain

Explaied.

"The track remains a regular song during West's live sets," - source? FN#33 does not support this claim

Removed.
References
  • FN#1 publisherid? Artist?
  • FN#3, FN#13, FN#14, FN#15, FN#16, FN#17, FN#18, FN#19, FN#20, FN#21, FN#22, and FN#23 be consistent in the way you give dates of published work, compare FN#2 and FN#1
  • FN#4, FN#15, FN#22, FN#25, FN#29 publisher?
  • FN#5, FN#6, FN#27 incorrect publisher
  • FN#8, FN#32 Idolator does not need to be italicize, it is not a printed source
  • FN#12 per above
  • FN#29 Rolling Stone needs to be italicize
  • FN#30, FN#33 do not shout
All done.

Placing article on hold until these are addressed. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 19:43, 7 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

All issues as of this moment have been met I believe. Bruce Campbell (talk) 21
35, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

Second look

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Lead

""Lost in the World" was initially released on September 29 2011" ---> coma?

Added.

"and was 6 minutes and 4 seconds long," ---> replace "was" to "is"

Done.

""Lost in the World" was initially released on September 29 2011 and was 6 minutes and 4 seconds long, but the version on the album was split up into two parts, with the outro becoming a new track entitled "Who Will Survive in America"" ---> this sentence is too long, needs splitting up

Done.

""Lost in the World" peaked at 104 on the South Korean Gaon Chart. " ---> add "number 104" or "No. 104"

Done.
  • ""Lost in the World" was sampled in several freestyles and remixes, including one with West's GOOD Music lablemate Pusha T." ---> there's no mention of this in the lead, needs source or needs to be added in the article.
Added.
Background
  • "initially titled" ----> so what's the new title?
Removed unnecessary use of initially.
Composition
  • "It is built on a sample of Gil Scott-Heron's "Comment No. 1", Scott-Heron's original speech, which criticized the 1960s Revolutionary Youth Movement for failing to recognize the more basic needs of the African-American community, is edited to a reduced version on the track that, according to Chicago Tribune writer Greg Kot, "retains its essence, that of an African-American male who feels cut off from his country and culture"." ----> this sentence needs splitting up
Done.
Live performances
  • "and headband" ---> and a headband
  • "it was reported West was" ---> it was reported that West was
Done.

Please fix these remaining issues. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 14:23, 10 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

How about now? Bruce Campbell (talk) 04:31, 13 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Passing article and sorry for the long wait. Best, Jonatalk to me 15:52, 26 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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