Talk:Laos at the 2012 Summer Olympics/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:52, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
Will take this review MWright96 (talk) 15:52, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
[edit]- Avoid bolding wikilinks per MOS:BOLDLINK
- and question: That was already there before I expanded. Didn't know that was a thing. Since the first sentence breaks up the article title, does removing the bold/wikilinks work for MOS:TITLEABSENTBOLD? --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:25, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Removing the bold works for MOS:TITLEABSENTBOLD MWright96 (talk) 18:49, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- and question: That was already there before I expanded. Didn't know that was a thing. Since the first sentence breaks up the article title, does removing the bold/wikilinks work for MOS:TITLEABSENTBOLD? --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:25, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- "when the event took part from 27 July – 12 August 2012." - can be either the event occurred from 27 July to 12 August 2012. or the eventh took place from 27 July to 12 August 2012.
- Went with the second option. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:25, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- "This was the nation's eighth consecutive Olympiad since 1980," - shouldn't that be eighth appearance overall and not consecutive since they did not participate in the 1984 Games?
- I think I meant seventh consecutive after not appearing in 1984. Reworded and added debut as well. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:25, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilink flag bearer
- and question: Done. Is it one word, two or with a dash? Google gives me different results --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:36, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- It depends MWright96 (talk) 18:49, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- and question: Done. Is it one word, two or with a dash? Google gives me different results --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:36, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilink the word opening to 2012 Summer Olympics opening ceremony and the word closing to 2012 Summer Olympics closing ceremony
- "while swimmer Phathana Inthavong did not reach farther than the 50 m freestyle heats." - Wikilink the text in bold to the relevant article
- "Inthavong placed the highest for Laos in 2012 with a 56th finish." - think there is a missing word between "56th" and "finish"
- Though I did say "placed" earlier in the sentence, I reworded it to make it sound better :) --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:36, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
Background
[edit]- Perphaps mention the 1984 Summer Olympics were in Los Angeles?
- question - If i do, what about the 1980 Summer Olympics? Would if flow properly if I add the city for one and not the other? Or should both cities be mentioned? --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:05, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Mention the 2012 Summer Olympics took place in London in the first paragraph
- "the Laotian runners used concrete barbell weights made from paint cans and tires." - tyres
- question - Not 100% about this one. I'm seeing results for tire and tyre. I know tyre is for British English ones like UK/Canada. Not sure if this in the case cause they were training in Laos. The source is also Singaporean as well. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:05, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- "For the 2012 Olympics, Kilakone Siphonexay and Laenly Phoutthavong represented the country in athletics while Phathana Inthavong competed in swimming." - consider linking the sports of the participants
- comment In my opinion, I think that'd be overlinking as they're common words. If you feel it's needed, let me know. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:05, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilink flag bearer
- and comment - similar question into the spelling of flagbearer per lead. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:05, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- As in the lead, wikilink the word opening to 2012 Summer Olympics opening ceremony and the word closing to 2012 Summer Olympics closing ceremony in the second paragraph
Athletics
[edit]- Wikilink personal best to the relevant article for the uninitated
- "Siphonexay was one second slower than the B standard qualifying time" - maybe write out the B standard qualifying time
- comment Would it be redundant per WP:CALC? I'd clarify that it was exactly one second slower. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:24, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilink men's 100 m to Athletics at the 2012 Summer Olympics – Men's 100 metres in the prose
- "Based on his placing and time during the heats, Siphonexay did not advance to the next round." - State the reason why he did not qualify for the next round
- comment That one and Phoutthavong I was having trouble wording it. I'll come back to those after. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:24, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Wikilink women's 100 m to Athletics at the 2012 Summer Olympics – Women's 100 metres in the prose
- "With her placing and a time of 13.15 seconds, Phoutthavong did not qualify for the first round." - Explain why she did not make it through to the next round
- comment same as Siphonexay --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:24, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Both the tables could do with referencing for extra verification
- Thought it'd be redundant citing, but I did it as I saw Brunei at the 2012 Summer Olympics also cited the tables. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:10, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
Key
[edit]- Delete the statements that are not used in any of the tables
- I originally left it as it was already there. However, now deleted as none of it was used. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:26, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
Swimming
[edit]- Wikilink men's 50 m freestyle to Swimming at the 2012 Summer Olympics – Men's 50 metre freestyle in the prose
- "His entry time of 28.94 seconds was 6.06 seconds slower than the invitational time for the Olympics." - maybe state the Olympic invitational time for the swimming event
- comment Similarly, I'm not sure if it'd be redundant to mention the exact time. 22.88 was the invitational time, which is 6.06 second faster than Inthavong's time.
- "slower than the invitational time for the Olympics.[24][23]" - refs in numerical order please
- I cite them in the order of the sentence they are used in. In this case, it's in the wrong order. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:32, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- "As Inthavong did not have one of the top 16 times during the heats, Inthavong did not qualify for the semifinals." - repetition of "Inthavong"
- Nice catch! --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:32, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- The results table might be better with references included for extra verification
- comment Tweaked table as it's the heat finish placing, not overall. Also added heat time in the prose as I missed it. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:35, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- cited the table. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:10, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
- comment Tweaked table as it's the heat finish placing, not overall. Also added heat time in the prose as I missed it. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:35, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
References
[edit]- The dashes in some of the references need to be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 17:47, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- @MWright96: Most I did, but I have some questions. Depending on when you reply, I might be away in the next hour or so as I have to go out. If that's the case, I'll reply as soon as I can. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:41, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- @MWright96: Pinging again in case you didn't see my comments above. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:53, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
- @MrLinkinPark333:} Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 20:59, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
- @MWright96: LOL i was editing the Athletics section to explain better why they didn't qualify. Thank you! Could you check it over since I'm looking to DYK it? --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 21:05, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
- @MrLinkinPark333: I will go over the article tomorrow MWright96 (talk) 21:09, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
- @MWright96: LOL i was editing the Athletics section to explain better why they didn't qualify. Thank you! Could you check it over since I'm looking to DYK it? --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 21:05, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
- @MrLinkinPark333:} Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 20:59, 14 February 2021 (UTC)
- @MWright96: Pinging again in case you didn't see my comments above. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:53, 14 February 2021 (UTC)