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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 18:15, 27 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]


an review throughought the next week Eddie891 Talk Work 18:15, 27 December 2020 (UTC)C[reply]

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Yeah, I looked at it. The user only uploaded two photos, this and the FMK mine image also used in the article. I looked around and couldn't see them used anywhere else online though. They also edited the Halcón ML-63 Argentine SMG article. I figured they may have some experience with the Argentine military, during which they took the photos - Dumelow (talk) 10:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm not convinced the bolding of the title really fits here == unbolding it would also let you get a link to the Islands in the first sentence, which I do think would fit here
Agreed, debolded and linked - Dumelow (talk) 08:57, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • " In the intervening years" not clear what years it's 'intervening'-- suggest in the following years or something
Agreed, changed - Dumelow (talk) 08:57, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Can you specify when the first efforts ended?
Yes, one of your new sources stated 1983. Added - Dumelow (talk) 09:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The mine fields were signed and fenced to warn visitors; no civilians have " I don't think the tenses line up here
I've expanded this section a little and split this part out - Dumelow (talk) 10:30, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The deadline was subsequently amended by agreement to 1 March 2019 and then to 1 June 2021; this was at the request of the British government owing to the high cost and slow outputs of clearance work" I think this may flow more naturally along the lines of "was subsequently amended at the request of the British government to 1 March and then 1 June, due to the high..." but I'm not sure
Done - Dumelow (talk) 09:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "used to verify that areas are clear " again, not sure the tenses line up how they should
Agreed, changed are to were
  • "in the first phase of operations" what is the 'first phase'?
God rid of this, not sure it's really that relevant - Dumelow (talk) 10:30, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "around 5 linear metres of a " should be converted, somehow?
Done - Dumelow (talk) 10:30, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Argentinian records are generally good " good being 'accurate' or something else?
Not sure where I got that from. The sources uses "not entirely reliable". I've amended this to match that - Dumelow (talk) 10:46, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Records for mine fields on West Falkland were patchier " than what?
Reworded - Dumelow (talk) 10:46, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Once a mine field was cleared and proven safe" how were they proven safe?
Not sure, source just says cleared so removed to match that - Dumelow (talk) 10:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • was the O-Revealer actually used in the Falkland Islands?
I can't find anything suggesting that it was ever deployed anywhere in the world. I've previously thought about removing it completely and have now done so - Dumelow (talk) 10:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "mines and releasing of previously inaccessible" what does "releasing" mean here?
Reworded - Dumelow (talk) 10:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "By this time 70% of all known land mines " by the end or beginning of that season?
Date added - Dumelow (talk) 10:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why would Argentina criticize the british operation for not including them? I'd expect them to be happy as they didn't have to pay for it?
It's all tied up in the sovereignty issue. They were claiming a violation of a 1976 UN General Assembly resolution against unilateral actions. I've expanded on this in the article - Dumelow (talk) 10:38, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Sourcing
  • Anything to add from articles like [1], [2], [3], [4] (from the abstract:"he background relating to the 14th July 1999 Joint Statement is considered in some detail as it relates to [...] land mines [...] on the Falkland Islands"
Good finds, I've incorporated some useful info into the article - Dumelow (talk) 09:59, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for your review Eddie891, I think I've replied to everything above - Dumelow (talk) 11:00, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Looks to meet the GA criteria to me, now. Thanks for your work and happy new year. Eddie891 Talk Work 17:00, 31 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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