Talk:Hugh of Fauquembergues/GA1
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 15:18, 20 February 2018 (UTC)
Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:18, 20 February 2018 (UTC)
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- No DAB links
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Prose Suggestions
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[edit]- Baldwin I of Jerusalem granted him Galilee after its first prince, Tancred, who was Baldwin's opponent, suggest Baldwin I of Jerusalem granted him Galilee after its first prince, Tancred, who was a rival of Baldwin,
- against Toghtekin, Atabeg of Damascus. suggest against Toghtekin, the Atabeg of Damascus.
Early life
[edit]- but their conflict was soon resolved. suggest but their conflict was soon made unnecesary.
Prince of Galilee
[edit]- However, the battle was not lost, because the king made a surprise attack against the Egyptians and defeated them. suggest However, they were not beaten, because the king made a surprise attack against the Egyptians and defeated them.
- That is all of my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:34, 21 February 2018 (UTC)
- @Iazyges:, thank you for your review and assessment. Sorry, I do not understand your above remarks. Do you suggest that the article should be modified? Borsoka (talk) 04:39, 22 February 2018 (UTC)
- @Borsoka: No problem. I am suggesting the text that comes first be changed into the text after "suggest". Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 05:47, 22 February 2018 (UTC)
- @Iazyges:, thank you for your review and assessment. Sorry, I do not understand your above remarks. Do you suggest that the article should be modified? Borsoka (talk) 04:39, 22 February 2018 (UTC)