Talk:Gervase of Bazoches/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:56, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:56, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
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5.a Y
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6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y

Discussion

Prose Suggestions

Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

Lede

was Prince of Galilee from 1105 or 1106 until his death suggest was prince of Galilee from 1105/1106 until his death.
but moved to the Holy Land, suggest but migrated to the Holy Land,
granted him Galilee in 1105 or 1106. suggest appointed him prince of Galilee in 1105/1106 else granted him rule over Galilee in 1105/1106
abandon three important towns in exchange for Gervase's release. suggest surrender three important towns in exchange for Gervase's release.

Prince of Galilee

Outraged by the king's answer, Toghtekin ordered Gervase be executed in Damascus.[1][8] Toghtekin's soldiers tied Gervase to a tree and shot arrows at him in May. suggest Outraged by the king's answer, Toghtekin ordered Gervase be executed in Damascus in May, ordering that he be tied to a tree and shot with arrows.
That is all my suggestions. A nice little article. Passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:17, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Iazyges:, thank you for your review and for your above suggestion. I modified the text in accordance with them. I slightly modified the one you suggested for the main text. Have a nice day! Borsoka (talk) 06:16, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]