Talk:Gervase of Bazoches

Gervase of Bazoches has been listed as one of the History good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: April 6, 2020. (Reviewed version).

This is the talk page for discussing improvements to the Gervase of Bazoches article.
This is not a forum for general discussion of the article's subject.

Put new text under old text. Click here to start a new topic.
New to Wikipedia? Welcome! Learn to edit; get help.

Article policies

Find sources: Google (books · news · scholar · free images · WP refs) · FENS · JSTOR · TWL

Biography: Military / Royalty and Nobility

	Biography portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject Biography, a collaborative effort to create, develop and organize Wikipedia's articles about people. All interested editors are invited to join the project and contribute to the discussion. For instructions on how to use this banner, please refer to the documentation.BiographyWikipedia:WikiProject BiographyTemplate:WikiProject Biographybiography articles
	This article is supported by the military biography work group (assessed as Low-importance).
	This article is supported by WikiProject Royalty and Nobility (assessed as Low-importance).

Military history: Biography / European / French / Medieval / Crusades

This article is within the scope of the Military history WikiProject. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the project and see a list of open tasks. To use this banner, please see the full instructions.Military historyWikipedia:WikiProject Military historyTemplate:WikiProject Military historymilitary history articles

Associated task forces:
/
	Military biography task force
	European military history task force
	French military history task force
	Medieval warfare task force (c. 500 – c. 1500)
	Crusades task force

Middle Ages: Crusades Low‑importance

	Middle Ages portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject Middle Ages, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of the Middle Ages on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Middle AgesWikipedia:WikiProject Middle AgesTemplate:WikiProject Middle AgesMiddle Ages articles
Low	This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale.
	This article is supported by the Crusades task force.

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Gervase of Bazoches/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:56, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:56, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

1
1.a Y

1.b Y
2
2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
3
3.a Y

3.b Y
4
4.a Y
5
5.a Y
6
6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y

Discussion

Prose Suggestions

Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

Lede

was Prince of Galilee from 1105 or 1106 until his death suggest was prince of Galilee from 1105/1106 until his death.
but moved to the Holy Land, suggest but migrated to the Holy Land,
granted him Galilee in 1105 or 1106. suggest appointed him prince of Galilee in 1105/1106 else granted him rule over Galilee in 1105/1106
abandon three important towns in exchange for Gervase's release. suggest surrender three important towns in exchange for Gervase's release.

Prince of Galilee

Outraged by the king's answer, Toghtekin ordered Gervase be executed in Damascus.[1][8] Toghtekin's soldiers tied Gervase to a tree and shot arrows at him in May. suggest Outraged by the king's answer, Toghtekin ordered Gervase be executed in Damascus in May, ordering that he be tied to a tree and shot with arrows.
That is all my suggestions. A nice little article. Passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:17, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Iazyges:, thank you for your review and for your above suggestion. I modified the text in accordance with them. I slightly modified the one you suggested for the main text. Have a nice day! Borsoka (talk) 06:16, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]