Talk:George Brian Sinclair/GA1

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 22:10, 8 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will review shortly .Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 22:10, 8 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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"Sinclair directly witnessed a number of nuclear tests during Operation Grapple, and twenty years later" I think it'd be worth specifying the year

The Times states "some twenty years later" (ie after 1976) and the Telegraph that it was in the last five years of his career (so 1978-1983). I've gone for "in the late 1970s" - Dumelow (talk) 10:36, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"the recovery of 85 Twynham huts" what is a 'twynham hut'?

It's a temporary accommodation building developed by the MoD in 1959. I'll see if I can scrape together enough info to put an article together rather than add detail to this article - Dumelow (talk) 10:36, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"becoming known as "that Sapper brigadier who solves problems and gets things done"." by who? Everyone?

The Times says by the British force on the island, but nothing more. I've added this in - Dumelow (talk) 10:36, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"and improved for use Phantom fighter jets to allow the Royal Navy's two aircraft carriers to return to home waters." I don't see the connection between the Royal Navy and the airfield-- could you explain that a bit?

Clarified, hopefully - Dumelow (talk) 10:36, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"This led to a dispute with the government during which Sinclair " what was the dispute over?

Whether the army should carry out the runway work (which would come from the defence budget) or if private contractors should be employed (which would come from general funding), I've tried to clarify this - Dumelow (talk) 10:36, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"The January 1983 replacement of John Nott as defence secretary by Michael Heseltine" so did Heseltine follow Nott in the role or was he the person who replaced Nott with someone else?

Ah, yes confusing wording. Heseltine replaced Nott. I've tried to clarify this - Dumelow (talk) 10:36, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Special:Diff/993521760 is my ce, please check to see that the changes are acceptable to you

Minor things, holding Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 01:43, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review Eddie891, your copy-edit is good - Dumelow (talk) 10:36, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Source spotcheck

Sorry, Dumelow, forgot that I haven't checked the sources
- Spotcheck lines up
Passing. Nice Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 12:24, 11 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]