Talk:French cruiser Victor Hugo/GA1

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 18:01, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this on over today and probably into tomorrow. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 18:01, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"Right elevation and deck plan as depicted in Brassey's Naval Annual 1923" perhaps "Right elevation and deck plan as depicted in Brassey's Naval Annual 1923"?
link Otranto Barrage as the "blockade of the Austro-Hungarian Navy in the Adriatic Sea"?
"reach their designed speed" -> "reach their top speed"? I'm not familiar with such a thing as 'designed speed'
- The speed which the ships were designed to achieve--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:35, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"anti-torpedo boat defense" maybe just "torpedo boat defense"? I don't think the anti- is needed
"was fully committed to building" -> "was committed to building"?
"the ships returned to Jamestown " had they arrived previously?
- Almost certainly, but not explicitly mentioned in the source.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:35, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
our article uses caps for "Naval Review"
- That would only be appropriate if it were a proper name.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:35, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"not the leisurely 6 knots" could do without 'leisurely'?
- No, it's important to emphasize that Léon Gambetta was basically just puttering along.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:35, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and to rebuild the army" maybe specify what army, or say "rebuild their army"?
"they decided to occupy the" -> "they occupied the"?
what is the "Salonica Front"?
"across the bridge over the Corinth Canal on 28 April to interfere" so was it just for one day or for the broader "early 1917"?
- No, between 28 April and 12 June.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:35, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
link Toulon?

That's it from me- all minor stuff, and open to discussion/disagreement. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 18:24, 23 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for catching all of these; just about all of them needed to be clarified.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:35, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Sturmvogel 66, I've spotchecked the sources, to the extent that I can access them, and see no issues with reliability, comprehensiveness, prose, copyvio, and neutrality. Happy to promote- Nice work! Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 23:26, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:44, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]