Talk:Francois Massaquoi

A fact from Francois Massaquoi appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 19 April 2023 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that Francois Massaquoi, who studied economics at New York University, later led the Lofa Defense Force during the First Liberian Civil War?

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Did you know nomination

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cielquiparle (talk) 13:49, 6 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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... ~~that the leader of the Lofa Defense Force during the First Liberian Civil War Francois Massaquoi was a New York University alumnus?~~ Source: John-Peter Pham (2004). Liberia: Portrait of a Failed State. Reed Press. p. 113. ISBN 978-1-59429-012-1.
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Mira Nadon

Created by Soman (talk). Self-nominated at 02:37, 3 March 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Francois Massaquoi; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]

@Soman: Drive-by comment, but I couldn't help but notice the NYU hook, since I have several family members and friends who graduated from NYU. The hook, as currently worded, feels somewhat like it's under-emphasizing Massaquoi's later importance as a military leader. How about something like this:
- ALT1: ... that Francois Massaquoi, who studied economics at New York University, later led the Lofa Defense Force during the First Liberian Civil War?
- ALT2: ... that Francois Massaquoi, who once ran a food importation business in New York, later led the Lofa Defense Force during the First Liberian Civil War?
As a New Yorker myself, I don't know too many NYU-educated economists or food importers who later became military leaders in Liberia. That's why I think these may be a lot more interesting to the casual reader. Epicgenius (talk) 19:29, 3 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'd be ok with ALT1. --Soman (talk) 20:06, 3 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Sounds good. Unfortunately, I can't review hooks that I've proposed, so I am requesting that someone else conduct a full review of this nomination. Epicgenius (talk) 20:32, 3 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

... New enough, long enough, no copyvio issues, QPQ provided. Approving ALT1 - short enough, interesting, in article and followed by citations to references with hook fact (one ref I can't access). Thanks both. Whispyhistory (talk) 05:46, 4 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]