Talk:Dissidia Final Fantasy/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 18:11, 1 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

OK. I've gone over it in detail and compared it against the Good Article Criteria. Generally okay and well-written, but a few quibbles. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:11, 1 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Quite good, except for "the player control the ten warriors chosen by Cosmos". There's a rather glaring grammatical error there. It should be "controls" not "control". Simple to correct.

Plot#Story

Well written, apart from "In the end, finding themselves in World A, the other warriors return to their respective worlds while the Warrior of Light embarks on another adventure, while Cosmos revives to reign over World B". Sounds rather clunky when you read it.

Developement

I would change "was" or "were" in the part of the first sentence that says "while the Square Enix staff was developing Kingdom Hearts II".

Reception#Reviews

A: "when things get hectic", might I suggest "got hectic".
B: "praised the fighting system and visuals with the latter commenting on the mix of RPG and action gameplay", might do with a comma between "visuals" and "with".
C: "The story resulted in mixed reactions as GameSpot stated that it would only interest fans from the franchise while 1UP noted it included multiple references from previous games." Some extra punctuation needed, because sentence seems too long in its current form.
D: "In contrast to most reviewers, Game Informer was more critical citing issues with the gameplay [..]" Again, punctuation needed.

Ok I fixed those issues, thanks for finding them. Is there anything else? Judgesurreal777 (talk) 18:44, 1 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Second pass

Nothing, either in the references or the text. It qualifies.