Talk:Cyclone Pat

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Review: May 7, 2015. (Reviewed version).

A fact from Cyclone Pat appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 3 May 2015 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that Cyclone Pat in February 2010 caused no fatalities despite damaging or destroying 78% of the homes on Aitutaki in the Cook Islands?

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Cyclone Pat/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hurricanehink mobile (talk · contribs) 02:02, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I would say earlier that Aitutaki is part of the Cook Islands in the lead. In the following sentence where it mentions the series of storms affecting there, say something like "Part of a series of storms that affected the island group..." I just think a little context earlier would be good. Also, maybe it's worth mentioning just how small Aitutaki is? That would give some welcome context.
- Added Cook Islands to the first sentence and added a note with some details about Aitutaki. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:36, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
445 km (277 mi) - no rounding?
- Stupid templates...fixed it Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"The Joint Typhoon Warning Center... issues tropical cyclone warnings for the western Pacific Ocean and other regions." - maybe change this to southern Pacific Ocean? I usually change this note based on the basin.
- Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Multiple banding features soon appeared..." - you already mentioned banding. How is this different? And you later said there were no prominent banding features when it became annular
- Removed the aforementioned repeat and specified that convection consolidated inward just prior to the annular term drop Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:25, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
What increased the wind shear?
- The advisory doesn't specify, "RECENT ANIMATED MULTISPECTRAL SATELLITE IMAGERY AND A 101802Z SSMIS MICROWAVE IMAGE INDICATE THAT THE LOW LEVEL CIRCULATION CENTER (LLCC) IS BEGINNING TO DECOUPLE FROM THE DEEP CONVECTION UNDER THE INFLUENCE OF INCREASING WESTERLY VERTICAL WIND SHEAR." Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"As the storm moved south" or southward...?
- Changed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"The blue lorikeet (Vini peruviana) population suffered dramatic losses due to the storm, with the population on Aitutaki dropping by more than 50 percent." - you should somehow indicate this is an animal, considering the previous sentences were about crops and trees.
- Added a tidbit specifying it's a bird. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"600 1.5 litre water bottles" - I think the exact litre amount is a bit trivial
- Removed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Finalization the funding for reconstruction was delayed and had not started by early June," - grammar?
- Not sure what's wrong here. It reads a little clunky, I guess, but don't think there's a grammar issue. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:25, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Depression set in among members throughout community the storm-battered community once the rebuilding process began." - I think you just stated your thought twice, but just wanted to check.
- Only once. The other mention of "depression" in that section was in reference to Tropical Depression 11F. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
How come you don't mention retirement in the aftermath?
- Was just to avoid unnecessary repetition since it's only a single sentence. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

All in all a really good article. Happy to pass soon. Hurricanehink mobile (talk) 02:02, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

That should be everything. Many thanks for the review! Cyclonebiskit (talk) 19:36, 6 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]