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Voivode of Transylvania

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I've listed this article for peer review because it needs a comprehensive review by those who are not familiar with the subject. I am not sure its wording and structure are clear and comprehensible for our readers. Thank you for your time. Borsoka (talk) 13:24, 27 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comment, I'm gonna try and give the article a quick look-over.

Thank you for your review and comments. Borsoka (talk) 01:58, 14 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"But Leustach Rátót voivode living some years earlier was mentioned by a document from 1230", This line is confusing, it doesn't explain why it's relevant.

Done (?). Borsoka (talk) 01:58, 14 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"The "guest settlers" at Boroskrakkó, Magyarigen (Ighiu) and Romosz (Romos)", what are "guest settlers", they are not mentioned anywhere else in the article.

Done (?). Borsoka (talk) 01:58, 14 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"To judge legal cases of peasants owning parcels", I can't figure out what "peasants owning parcels" means from the text.

Done (?). Borsoka (talk) 01:58, 14 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The large number of bracketed place names makes some sections rather cluttered-looking.

Perhaps, but the ignorance of one of the names would led to edit warring. Borsoka (talk) 01:58, 14 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Sections 3 and 4 jump from name to name very quickly, making them kind of hard to follow.

I deleted some names. Borsoka (talk) 01:58, 14 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Section 4 doesn't explain all to well how the Voivode actually ended, I had to read it a couple of times before I got that it was because of a transition to being styled as "prince". It could definitely do with a closing sentence, since now the section just sort of ends abruptly. Devonian Wombat (talk) 12:13, 13 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]