Wikipedia:Peer review/The Bellflower Bunnies (season 3)/archive1
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Now that I'm done with the season lists, I might be finally off to editing the main book and show pages for the Passiflore franchise, as part of my plans for a featured topic on it.
If you are checking over this, please see also:
Thanks, Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 04:09, 15 October 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: I think this is the third time I have reviewed this material (since it used to be part of the larger list). I hope I can still keep critical distance to review it well, and I do think it is much better. I have also reviewed the Season 2 list and some the comments may be very similar. Anyway, here are some suggestions for improvement.
- There are still some places that need a bit polish on the language - I think getting someone to copyedit before FLC would be very useful. Just a few examples: The title card for Season 3 as it appears in English (also used for Season 2). Characters from left to right: Poppy, Violette and Periwinkle. why not just say something like The title card for Seasons 2 and 3 as it appears in English. ...? Or At the beck and call of a jealous badger, Poppy must build a machine to lift out a sacred treasure from a lake. I am not sure about this, maybe something like Poppy must build a machine for a jealous badger to lift a sacred treasure from a lake.??
- Some places seem to needs refs Returnees included director Eric Berthier, producer Particia Robert, writer Valérie Baranski, executive co-producer Paul Cadieux, and executive producers Yves Pont and Franck Algard. or This season runs approximately 580 minutes in length. Except for "Les Passiflore à la mer" (based on an original Beechwood Bunny Tale), the episodes are based on original scripts by Valérie Baranski. No English titles have been supplied for them.
- Is there any way to make the table internal divisions all the same size / width? The lines between the title and the air date vary considerably on my computer and would look much nicer if they were always in the same place (formatting)
- This season runs approximately 500 minutes in length. probably needs a ref. It is more usual to indicate the length of a typical episode (I think), as well as the total length.
- In the note Numbers to the right refer to their positions in this season. could an example be added, see Season 2 review for a suggestion.
- Could the two two-sentence paragraphs in Episodes be combined to make one paragraph?
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:18, 24 October 2008 (UTC)