Wikipedia:Peer review/The Bellflower Bunnies (season 2)/archive1
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Two seasons down...and one more to go by tomorrow. Again, this may be as comprehensive as the season in question can get, but I might be able to add in a little more.
See also the PR on the first season, and the FLC on the main episode list, if you are checking over this.
Thanks, Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 10:39, 14 October 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: I think this is the third time I have reviewed this material (since it used to be part of the larger list). I hope I can still keep critical distance to review it well, and I do think it is much better. I will also review the Season 3 list and some the comments may be very similar. Anyway, here are some suggestions for improvement.
- There are still some places that need a bit polish on the language - I think getting someone to copyedit before FLC would be very useful. Just a few examples: Co-production partners for this season included France's TF1, Euro Visual,[3] Big Cash,[1] and that country's department of Walt Disney Television.[1] why not just say something like " and the French department of Walt Disney Television"? Or in Left alone by Bramble and Zinnia, the five young rabbits decide to make fried doughnuts. why not use the word beignet (which seems to mean the same thing) and link it?
- Is there any way to make the table internal divisions all the same size / width? The lines between the title and the air date vary considerably on my computer and would look much nicer if they were always in the same place (formatting)
- This season runs approximately 500 minutes in length. The first nine episodes are based on original Beechwood Bunny Tales, and the rest are written by Baranski. probably needs a ref. It is more usual to indicate the length of a typical episode (I think), as well as the total length.
- The italics in "Based on Le Noël des Passiflore (ISBN 2-7459-0495-7)." and the other book titles seem oddly italicized to me - usually the title is in italics, so "Based on Le Noël des Passiflore (ISBN 2-7459-0495-7)."
- In the note Numbers to the right refer to their positions in this season. could an example be added, something like "So for Bunnies on the Case "O 6/2" means this is officially the sixth episode of the whole series and the second official episode for this season, while "B 8/4" means this is the eighth episode in the series in broadcast order and fourth episode broadcast this season." Probably can find a way to say it more concisely.
- Could the two one-sentence paragraphs in Awards and merchandise be combined to make one paragraph?
- Why does the Region 1 and 2 DVD list Epsiodes on the disc by official number, while the German table does not include this information (it is in the intro instead) and the Hungarian table uses English titles? Be consistent.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 01:52, 24 October 2008 (UTC)