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Paige Bueckers

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I've listed this article for peer review in hopes of bringing it to featured article status. Any feedback would be appreciated.

Thanks, Sportzeditz (talk) 04:37, 14 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Pinging some editors who might be interested: @The Rambling Man:, @Casliber:, @Sportsfan77777:, @Spitzmauskc: Sportzeditz (talk) 20:04, 14 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720

I have added this PR to the Template:FAC peer review sidebar to get quicker and more responses. When this PR is closed, please remove it from the list. Also, consider adding the sidebar to your userpage to help others discover pre-FAC PRs, and please review other articles in that template.

I also suggest that you reach out to editors listed at WP:FAM, as I believe this is your first FAC. A mentor will ensure that the article is ready before it is nominated at FAC. Lastly, I strongly encourage you to review articles at WP:FAC right now; this builds goodwill among FA editors, allows you to get to know the FA process and shows other editors that you know the FA criteria. Z1720 (talk) 16:20, 14 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from cas Liber

Rushed for time right now but this may help:

Avoid 1-2 sentence paragraphs.

@Casliber: There are no longer any 1 sentence paragraphs. The only 2 sentence paragraphs left are in the lead and "Business interests" section - I am not sure how to expand these paragraphs. Sportzeditz (talk) 03:52, 16 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

She also felt that she could "make an impact right away" at UConn - try to rephrase so you don't need to use quotation marks.

Done. Sportzeditz (talk) 03:52, 16 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Does she cite any influences?

This is mentioned in the "Early life and career" section. Sportzeditz (talk) 03:52, 16 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Might take a look at prose later when I have some time free Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:19, 16 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Casliber: I have nominated this article for FAC. Feel free to leave comments there. Sportzeditz (talk) 18:42, 4 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Sportsfan77777

I think it's in pretty good shape already. Some quick small things: Clarify 4A is a regional class (or that it's a regional state championship). Her freshman season is missing that UConn lost to Arizona in the Final Four. Personal life is missing that her father remarried. It could also state a bit more explicitly that she has a close relationship with her brother Drew.

It's not common to nominate biographies for players this early in their career. That said, there is no rule against it. Milos Raonic was a relatively recent example of an FA that passed in a similar situation. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 11:06, 21 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Sportsfan77777: All points have been addressed. Although it is early in the subject's career, I expect to keep this article up to date, having been a regular contributor to it for almost 2 years. Sportzeditz (talk) 16:46, 21 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]