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Lynn de Silva

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I'd be very grateful if I could get some assistance with editing this article to get it up to FA quality. It has been a GA for 6 years now, and has had over 1,200 revisions in total by over 80 editors. When I nominated it to be upgraded to a FA, I was basically told to "review WP:WIAFA and spend some time ensuring all statements are cited and that WP:MOS is followed".

Thanks! Ldesilva (talk) 17:11, 17 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello Ldesilva. The article looks well-written but there are some parts that left me confused. For example:

The lead has some references which is something other FAs avoid. I think I really like WP:Lead considering how I follow that guide. Maybe if you remove some doubtful information you could remove the sources and move them to the articles' body.
There are some sentences in the article unsourced like the first one "Hugh de Silva died whilst studying to be ordained." or "He also took a study course in Mahayana Buddhism at the Vidyodaya University in Sri Lanka. During his studies, Lynn and Lakshmi had their second son, Lalith Chrishantha de Silva, on 16 September 1954." The same goes for the second paragraph of Thanatology.
Also, I have requested a peer review for Allen Walker here so I would appreciate some feedback.

Still nice work in the article. I hope it becomes a FA.Tintor2 (talk) 14:26, 21 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Image Review: File:Lynn and Lakshmi.jpg - There is no proof by the description ("This picture was given to me by one of their children") that the uploader holds the copyright. Wikipedia:Requesting copyright permission needs to be used. Similar issues for the other photos attributed to The de Silva family.
All dates like birth of his children needs references
The whole generic Intro of "History of Buddhist-Christian relations in Sri Lanka" from the 16th century seems WP:UNDUE. Most of the content is relevant to Christianity in Sri Lanka. Only the most relevant part to de Silva needs to be retained. The article can contrast de Silva's attitude to Buddhism with older Christian attitudes, for example.
"He died soon afterward, having continued to work until the end." The tone is more wp:peacocky rather than encyclopedic.

Redtigerxyz ^Talk 18:45, 25 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]