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List of Reborn! chapters

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I've listed this article for peer review because to see if it needs some copy-edit or some parts need to be easier to understand.

Thanks, Tintor2 (talk) 13:11, 22 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

If chapters are referred to as "Targets", why is this not reflected in the chapter list? I did this with Tramps Like Us, where chapters are "Rules". Could "one hundred and ninety-five" be 195 per WP:MOSNUM? -Malkinann (talk) 22:33, 22 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Done.Tintor2 (talk) 22:56, 22 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Cheers. Another thing you might want to look at is your use of commas - one sentence, one idea! -Malkinann (talk) 22:58, 22 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Collectonian (talk · contribs)
  • "This article shows the chapters of the manga series" - FLC no longer likes lists to have things like that. Would recommend just saying something like "The manga series Reborn!, written and illustrated by Akira Amano, is comprised of X chapters—called "Targets"."
  • The first two sentences of the second paragraph should be in the first paragraph before the plot summary. The sentence on the anime can go after the licensing.
  • The sources need clean up as they have excessive stuff in the title. For example:
{{cite web|url=http://books.shueisha.co.jp/CGI/search/syousai_put.cgi?isbn_cd=4-08-873680-X&mode=1|title=家庭教師ヒットマンREBORN！／1｜天野　明｜ジャンプコミックス｜BOOKNAVI｜集英社|publisher=[[Shueisha]]|accessdate=2007-11-22|language=Japanese}}
should be
{{cite web |url=http://books.shueisha.co.jp/CGI/search/syousai_put.cgi?isbn_cd=4-08-873680-X&mode=1|title=家庭教師ヒットマンREBORN！／1 |publisher=[[Shueisha]] |accessdate=2007-11-22 |language=Japanese}}
  • The Amazon refs need clean up - should not have the referer part or other excess
  • I'm not sure about using flagicons for the titles, but can't think of a better way to handle it.
  • The ELs section is probably unnecessary; the first two repeat the references and the ANN doesn't add extra content beyond that (if kept, the English tags are unnecessary)
  • Other than that, a general copy edit and should be good to go for FLC.

Hope that helps. :) -- Collectonian (talk · contribs) 01:51, 23 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. It seems the user Darkangel made some things you said.Tintor2 (talk) 14:21, 23 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Done.Tintor2 (talk) 01:20, 25 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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