Wikipedia:Peer review/José García Villa/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I am planning to submit this for GA, possibly FA.
Thanks, Starczamora (talk) 09:18, 28 February 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: this is pretty close to GA or eventual FA as it is. Here are some more suggestions:
- The lead should follow WP:LEAD and summarize the article, as well as not add any facts not in the body of the article.
- Needs a copyedit, especially for punctuation.
- I know he used commas in his poetry, but He was, awarded, the National Artist of the Philippines title... should read He was awarded the National Artist of the Philippines title....
- Spelling is odd - some in quotes, so please double check those (copyedit and proof read). Examples He is known to have introduced the "reversed consonance rime scheme" in writing poetry,... should be "rhyme" (rime is a kind of ice). Or "The commas are an integral and essential part of the medium: regulating the poem's verbal density and time movement: enabling each word to attain a fuller tonal value, and the line movement to become more measures."[4] - the last word does not fit, perhaps it is supposed to be measured instead?
- Early life, Personal and Death sections are all very short - could they be combined into a single section? Also tense is odd - in Death it says He also has three grandchildren. but he is dead, so he can't be present tense ("had", not "has")
- Images are decent, references seem OK. Good article which needs a little polish,
Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 01:50, 14 March 2008 (UTC)