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I've listed this article for peer review because I really want this song to become FA status. It holds so memory memories for me and I would love to see the gold star on the article. Pinging Ceoil. Seeing if they still want to help.
Thanks, Shoot for the Stars 💫 (talk) 04:41, 14 May 2021 (UTC)
- First time I do a peer review (or review of any kind), kinda just testing out things here so this review can be a bit surface-level.
- user:Ceoil improved the lead and I don't want to ruin it.
- Lead would be benefited by an additional paragraph with mentions of reception, covers, and certifications
- Added
- The final sentence at Background and composition is citation overkill
- Got rid of a source
- "for the Pitch Perfect soundtrack." > "for the Pitch Perfect soundtrack."
- Refs 10, 16, 54, 55, and 56 should have archive-urls—though the Wayback Machine does exclude some websites from their system
- Added
- Cite Billboard as publisher instead of work for ref 52
- Billboard is always cited as work.
- The minimal use parameter at the Cups cover art rationale should explain why the use is minimal rather than the image's purpose; see the cover art of Everywhere at the End of Time for an example
- Done
- Again, very shallow review but hopefully helpful. Wetrorave (talk) 04:10, 2 June 2021 (UTC)
- I do not particularly know about this song but I think I did hear it somewhere, though it doesn't appear to have charted in my country. When I saw this has remained unanswered for two weeks, I got reminded of this aforementioned article which I've nominated for GA on 22 April but which continues unreviewed for more than a month. It does get frustrating but on the bright side, later reviews means better articles. Wetrorave (talk) 04:29, 2 June 2021 (UTC)
- Wetrorave Thanks a lot for the comments! Your help is truly appreciated! The song was a huge hit in United States. Every teen and preteen (including me) would play the cup song non stop. You know I'm shooting for the stars, aiming for the moon 💫 (talk) 08:35, 2 June 2021 (UTC)
- Well then 💫, I hope it didn't get as annoying as Shake It Off or Shape of You. Seriously, I heard the verse "I'm in love with your body" EVERYWHERE, and it sickened me >:( Wetrorave (talk) 13:52, 2 June 2021 (UTC)
- Wetrorave Thanks a lot for the comments! Your help is truly appreciated! The song was a huge hit in United States. Every teen and preteen (including me) would play the cup song non stop. You know I'm shooting for the stars, aiming for the moon 💫 (talk) 08:35, 2 June 2021 (UTC)
- I do not particularly know about this song but I think I did hear it somewhere, though it doesn't appear to have charted in my country. When I saw this has remained unanswered for two weeks, I got reminded of this aforementioned article which I've nominated for GA on 22 April but which continues unreviewed for more than a month. It does get frustrating but on the bright side, later reviews means better articles. Wetrorave (talk) 04:29, 2 June 2021 (UTC)
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Comments from Gerda
[edit]Sorry, I procrastinated this enough for you to adopt a new name.
- Lead:
- I am new to the topic, and would much prefer to first understand about the 1931 origins, and what kind of song it is, than three versions of an album, all with similar titles. (... and only later I understand that one of the titles is a comedy.)
- In the sentence about billboard, I didn't remember what "It" meant.
- Infobox:
- I'd prefer if the image aligned with the title boxes. Is that kind of cheating allowed? (Compare my latest: St. Nikolaus von Flüe, Wörsdorf)
- Background
- The image looks altogether abstract to me, and comes too soon for me to make sense of the caption.
- What's in the caption (link to the group, a year) needs to be in the prose, for those who don't look at the caption first.
- I'd like the year of the remix repeated rather than vaguely remembering and having to look at the lead again.
- Critical reception
- Wouldn't "Reception" suffice?
- Is a review saying nothing but "charming" worth mentioning?
- Can - in USA Today - a clash of "is" and "was" be avoided?
- "saying it still hits one hell of a flat note": should that be a quote, or be "saying it still hit one hell of a flat note"? (I have no idea what the phrase, but that's probably just me.)
- Music video
- "The clip begins with Kendrick, as a server, standing in restaurant kitchen. takes it and lightly taps it on the table." Some cup seems to be missing.
- good link to bridge (music), but it should come higher up when mentioned first
- probably everybody but me knows what "flip cup" means
Enjoy! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:45, 3 June 2021 (UTC)
- Gerda Arendt I am so sorry that I did not see your comments! It looks like you commented on a peer review that is archived from November 2020, so I put your comments on the most recent peer review. I will respond to your comments tomorrow after I get a few hours of sleep. You know I'm shooting for the stars, aiming for the moon 💫 (talk) 09:16, 8 June 2021 (UTC)