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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to get it promoted to Good Article status. The main problem with this article is the length, because the subject of the article is a manga comic that ran for just one chapter before it was cancelled. Any help as to how to expand it would also be helpful, if indeed it can be expanded.
Thanks, ISD (talk) 06:22, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
- One Way you may be able to expand it a bit is by making a section for its release before the cancelation. Currently this information is in the plot and lead, but may be better as one section. If you could leave comments on my peer review, that would be great. Regards, Link20XX (talk) 14:00, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
I would say. First of all, try to reduce the amount of quotes and try revise that section in the form of a generalizations. Observe similar comments and combine them. If you plan to bring it to GA, I also suggest expanding the lead to at least two paragraphs per wp:lead.Tintor2 (talk) 16:59, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
- Very heavy MOS:JARGON: This is the main problem, noth the length. Most of what's written in the lead and in Cheat Slayer#Plot is unintelligible to almost everyone. For example, what does this mean:
The series followed a person who casts judgment on the people who reincarnated into another world and indulge in cheat skills.
- What does it mean to "cast judgement" in this context? The protagonist says contemptuous things about other characters? Obviously not -- but then what does it refer to? He fights them? Kills them? It has to be said using normal language
- "another world": so the action takes place in "another world", as in other from what? If it's the primary setting where the action takes place then that world can't be "another world", I mean it needs to be said differently, such as fictional world.
- Just what does "cheat skills" refer to? The manga jargon needs to be toned down from 11 to like 2. — Alalch Emis (talk) 17:39, 29 July 2021 (UTC)- This is just an idea of how it can be done: diff — Alalch Emis (talk) 19:34, 29 July 2021 (UTC)