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1967 Intercontinental Cup

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've added significant amount of content and would like a view on what I've done and what improvements/ changes would be appropriate.

Thanks, ShugSty (talk) 14:23, 16 May 2015 (UTC)

Comments from Csisc

First, I thank you for your initiative to review the work for the 1967 Intercontinental Cup... The work is important because it describes very well the problems faced by the first editions for this important competition... It gives a very good overview about the situation in which such competitions were held and played and detailed and most important information about what exactly happened. However, I think that this is not sufficient... More information should be efficiently provided...

• Circumstances: Minor information are provided about how teams had travelled to play the games, where they had lived during the games, how they afforded the expenses of the travels, how they did the physical preparations to play the games... These details are important to see the situation provided to the two teams to play this match. You can use citations from players who assisted to this important match and get some information about this from the references that are cited in this work...
• Supporters: You can write about sponsors who afforded some money for the two teams to play this important competititon and for the organization of the two games... You can also talk about the reason of the choice of Uruguay for playing the third game... These details are important and can be useful to see the situation of football in that particular period... You can also talk about the supporters and how they had travelled to see the games and how they react after the three games... You can talk about the name of the supporters and their wears and clothes and how these clothes were made and brought... You can talk about supporting songs of the two teams and if they had worsened the situation... So, you have the choice on how to proliferate your work...
• Objects: You can write about the wear of the two teams and if they were made particularly from the Intercontinental Cup... You can talk about how they were made... You can even talk about the balls of this important competition. You can describe it and even give some further information about how they were designed and the comments of the interested audience about them... This details could be extremely important although there are not the main ones for this important work...
• Amelioration: You can ameliorate the work by developing the part about the rules of the 1967 Intercontinental Cup by involving more detailed information about the rules for the choice of the place of the third game, the choice of referees for games... You can talk also about the fees of the tickets to see the games, the fees provided to referees... The part about the final third game has to be proliferated and developed by including the reactions of the players during the third game and what they have done in the last minutes of the match and after the match... "After the game, the Scottish dressing room was invaded by Argentinian fans and a battle between Argentinian and Uruguayan (who supported Celtic) fans broke out outside the stadium" should be more developed and the part talking about what exactly happened after the competitions should be proliferated by involving more details about talking more about what happened to players after these circumstances. These details are important and I think that developing them will help you ameliorate the structure of your paper and the coverage of the paper to all the important detailed information of the competition.

Yours Sincerely,

--Csisc (talk) 11:14, 17 May 2015 (UTC)