Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Tom Mix filmography/archive1

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Tom Mix filmography

Nominator(s): Jimknut (talk) 21:16, 25 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because Tom Mix was a major and influential star of the early days of American cinema. He warrants having an outstanding filmography. I strongly believe that what is offered here is of FL status. Please take a look and tell me what you think. Jimknut (talk) 21:16, 25 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Birdienest81

Comma after the phrase "Soon after" in the second paragraph in the intro.

Fixed.

Remove hyphen after the word "one" in that same paragraph.

Fixed.

Comma after the phrase, "With the coming of sound" in the third paragraph.

Fixed.

Comma between "1935" and "he" in that same paragraph.

Fixed.

Comma between "this" and "Mix" in the paragraph about his 1910 filmography.

Fixed.

Comma between "1911" and "Mix" in the paragraph about his 1911 releases.

Fixed.

Comma between "1912" and "Mix" and "this" and "Mix" in the paragraph about 1912.

Fixed.

Comma between "1913" and "Mix" in the paragraph about 1913.
"In January 1913 Mix accepted an offer from Selig to return to acting in films as part of a production unit in Prescott, Arizona, until the supervision of actor-director William Duncan." Do you mean under the supervision?

Fixed.

Comma between "time" and "Mix" in the paragraph about 1914.

Fixed.

It's mostly grammatical errors that plaguing this article. Otherwise, it looks good.

--Birdienest81 (talk) 04:28, 17 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

All corrections made. Thanks. Jimknut (talk) 17:53, 17 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Ojorojo

This looks very thorough and well-referenced. My questions are about the layout, etc.

Links, especially in the lead, may be overused. Words such as star, showmanship, physical fitness, bartender, peace officer, 2nd. cowboy, 2nd. director, and most city and state names probably do not warrant linking.
- Unlinked.
The "Archives with Mix films" section appears first, before listing the films. Wouldn't this be better at the end?
- Archive listing now moved to the end.
In the first group of tables, "Yes" is highlighted in green, which gives an unbalanced look (no other colors are used). I don't think this adds anything. Also, why use capital "Y" in yes, but all caps in "NO"? This may present better by a "" mark for yes and "blank" for no. Or to save space, combine the three columns into a "Contribution" column and write out "actor, screenwriter, and director" as appropriate (with line breaks so they are "stacked" and not horizontal). Or use codes (for example: ACT, SCR, DIR).
- "Yes" and "no" formating removed. Information now added into the notes.
Starting with the "Fox Film Corporation", the table format changes (Actor and Screenwriter columns are dropped, "Survival status" is added). A consistent format throughout is preferable. Or include a paragraph that introduces the new "era" and information about the films to ease/explain the transition to the different format.

—Ojorojo (talk) 16:26, 21 February 2016 (UTC)[reply]

- Text added to clarify this.

Follow up comments needed! Please help if you can. — Jimknut (talk) 21:10, 13 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Support – My comments have been addressed. Expanding the "Notes" section and removing the "Yes/NO" columns (and color) is an effective solution. The earlier tables are now easier to read (less busy) and more consistent with the later ones. Good work! —Ojorojo (talk) 16:43, 15 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FLC/ar, and leave the {{featured list candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. – SchroCat (talk) 08:29, 29 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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