Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of The Bellflower Bunnies episodes/archive2
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The list was not promoted by User:Matthewedwards 02:57, 20 October 2008 [1].
previous FLC (16:14, 8 May 2008)
- Previous peer reviews: 1st (March/April), 2nd (May/June), 3rd (September/October)
In the words of Violette Bellflower/Pirouette Passiflore:
| “ | Rule #4 of good writing: It takes a lot of rewriting and rethinking. | ” |
And, after long weeks and months of figuring it out, here I am, about to start what could possibly be my first (and maybe only) featured or good topic. I'm 96% sure that everything has been addressed from the PRs and last FLC.
To borrow a little something from Reginald Lewis: "Why should Simpsons freaks and anime geeks have all the fun?" Well, I'm finally about to take you all on.
Now, give me a triple crown... --Slgrandson (How's my egg-throwing coleslaw?) 14:31, 6 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments - sources look good, links checked out with the link checker tool. Note I was not able to evaluate the non-English sources. Ealdgyth - Talk 13:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments
- Especially in the case of season 2, the order of the broadcast episodes differs drastically from the official sequence provided by Institut National de l'Audiovisuel (INA) and AnimezVous.com. - Why not just say The order of the broadcast episodes for season 2 differ from the official sequence provided by Instit National de I'Audiovisuel (INA) and NimezVous.com. (It gets rid of "especially" and "drastically" as those are in a way WP:POV.
- Not that it is against policy, but IMO is against Cr 1 + 5: the style of how the dates are written are different throughout, they should all be consistent. (I.G. 2002 December and December 2002)
- So there was no English title for episode #8? If not, can a note be given as to why?
- Why doesn't season three have the source for material column, just curious.--SRX 13:09, 9 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Merge some of the paragraphs in the lead; too many small ones.
- "Series overview" – "Overview"
- "Only in Germany have titles been given for all 52 episodes" – "Have titles been given for all 52 episodes in Germany only" – please try to keep sentences passive when possible.
- "Especially in the case of season 2, the order of the broadcast episodes differs drastically from the official sequence provided by Institut National de l'Audiovisuel (INA) and AnimezVous.com." – convert into active voice
- "Series overview" – the paragraphs can be merged together (in a logical manner) also
Gary King (talk) 21:54, 9 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.