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Nominator(s): « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:02, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Of all the lists I have brought to FLC, this was the most challenging from a development perspective. As always, happy to implement any edits or answer any questions. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:02, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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MPGuy2824

In the "Most Valuable Player" table:

  • "Player of the year award" should have "colgroup" as the scope.
  • Images are missing alt text.

I found the same issues in the next section too. Please fix this over the whole page. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 11:32, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

MPGuy2824, got them both, thanks! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:41, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
MPGuy2824, if you have the time for a full review, I would really appreciate. No worries either way! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 01:35, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Adding more comments here:

  • Consider linking "playoffs" somewhere. Maybe in the lead.
  • There is an unexplained overlap in the "Team awards" section: "NFL champion (1920–35)" and "NFL champion (1934–67)". Please fix.
  • "quarterback rating" needs a wikilink or an explanatory note.
  • George Halas, who played, coached and owned the Chicago Bears Maybe "played with" or "played in" might work better.
  • A few of the refs are missing archive links.

I didn't see any other problem with the prose or table accessibility. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 09:11, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks MPGuy2824, I really appreciate it! All comments addressed. Let me know if there is anything else. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:14, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I forgot to mentioned, User:IABot isn't archiving new links right now. All old links are archived and I will update the page when IABot is up and running again. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:15, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Support. BTW, one can manually add archive links, but I'll trust you on running IABot when it is available. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 16:51, 18 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Drive-by comment

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  • I will do a full review at some point, but one point that jumps out is repeated use of "the first Packers' player" / "the only Packers' player" / etc. There should not be an apostrophe there, because "Packers" is being used adjectivally, not possessively. If you used the first part of the team name rather than the second you would not say "he became the first Green Bay's player to do [whatever]".... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 15:51, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
ChrisTheDude, I think I got them all here. Thanks! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:22, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
ChrisTheDude if you are able to complete a full review, I would greatly appreciate it! Thanks for any insight you may have. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:05, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Apologies, I forgot all about this. Here's my comments......
  • "four Super Bowls, which is inclusive of two additional NFL Championships won during the merger of the NFL and American Football League (AFL), since then." - is the qualifier between the commas really needed? It makes the sentence a bit long and hard to unpack.....
  • Write out MVP in full on first use in the body as well as the lead
  • "In 2014, Rodgers has another season" => "In 2014, Rodgers had another season"
  • "The awardee is selected near the end of the game by electronic fan voting" - presumably only since a certain date.....?
  • "Holmgren's award came during first season with the Packers" => "Holmgren's award came during his first season with the Packers"
  • "after increasing the teams' record from 4–12" => "after increasing the team's record from 4–12"
  • In the notes, I think "Rookie of the year awards are only eligible for first-year players" is the wrong way round and should be "Only first-year players are eligible for Rookie of the year awards"
  • Also in the notes, odd capitalisation in "SN awards their player of the Year award"
  • That's all I got :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 06:44, 14 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 05:28, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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