Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Francisco de Mendoza/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 11 June 2019 [1].

Francisco de Mendoza

Nominator(s): Telex80 (talk) 04:25, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This Article was well written and has all the evidence regarding the history of the Eighty Years War. Telex80 (talk) 04:25, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by RetiredDuke

I don't think this article is quite ready for a FA nomination:

For starters, it doesn't have a lead that properly summarizes the article body. For an example of how even the shortest bio can have a proper lead, see Lawrence Weathers.
Secondly, that wall of text that is the body of the article has to be broken up in smaller sections, like Early life and The 80 Years War or some such.
Thirdly, just by skimming the article diagonally I spotted some inappropriate passages like "the king was not amused", "decided to kill two birds with one stone", "unfortunately did not live long" (POV language).
It also has very few inline citations, it should have more than just one at the end of each paragraph.
Lastly, "Nominators must be sufficiently familiar with the subject matter" but you have not edited the article at all.

Premature nomination. RetiredDuke (talk) 11:31, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I would second RetiredDuke's comments here, maybe a peer review would be a better way to go before taking a run at FA. Kosack (talk) 12:22, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Coord note

Not having edited the article is enough for archiving on procedural grounds (see instructions at the top of WP:FAC) but the other points raised above are also well-made and should be taken into account before anyone considers re-nominating here. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 21:39, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 21:40, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.