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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted 16:20, 5 November 2007.

Edward Low

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This article, about one of the lesser-known but most brutal pirates of the Golden Age of Piracy has recently been labelled as a good article. However, my intent has always been to take it on to FA. Given the length of the article, the fact it (to my eyes) meets all the featured article criteria, and has been through some pretty extensive checking, I would like to submit it to be a featured article. It's well written, particularly now it's been rigorously copyedited by User:Malleus Fatuarum and User:Maralia. It's fully referenced. All pictures are legit to the best of my knowledge. It's comprehensive without going "overboard" (pirate pun there), bearing in mind Low's piratical career only lasted 3 years tops. Peer review (which didn't provide any human advice) can be found here. Let me know what you think! Neil ム 09:43, 6 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment
    • An images caption should only end with a full-stop if it forms a complete sentence.  Done - now consistent
    • There is incorrect dash usage in the infobox and footnotes.  Done, I think - if it's still not correct, please do tell me what is incorrect
    • All web references need the author, publisher and publishing date, if known.  Done
    • Full dates in the footnotes need linking.  Done - they were all linked already (I can't see one that isn't, unless you mean the American Weekly Mercury one, which is a date range (6 - 13 June 1723) and should not be wikilinked)
    • Non-breaking spaces should be places between numbers and units.  Done
    • Imperial measurements should be accompanied by the metric equivalent in brackets, and vice versa.  Done
    • Text should not be sandwiched between two adjacent images, as in the Influence section.  Done
    • "The Victoria's Portuguese captain allowed a bag containing approximately 11,000 gold moidores (worth at the time around £15,000)" - is that £15,000 in today's money?  Done - it says "at the time" - I am unsure how to say it in any clearer a manner
    • "an 80-ton schooner" - is that a long ton or short ton?  Done - references say "ton", as opposed to "tonne", and given the period and usage, it's long ton - first use wikilinked to inform reader
    • A bit more copyediting needed, for example:
      • "Following the death of his wife during childbirth in late 1719, he became a pirate two years later" - either "following" or "two years later" is redundant.  Done
      • "operating off the coasts of New England, the Azores, and in the Caribbean" - I think an "and" is needed between "New England" and "the Azores".  Done
      • "a reputation for violently torturing his victims" - all torture is violent  Done - no it isn't!
      • "Low led the twelve man gang – which included Francis Farrington Spriggs – in taking over a small sloop off the coast of Rhode Island, killing one man, and officially turned pirate determined "to go in her, make a black Flag and declare War against all the World."" - difficult to follow. And is it possible for someone to officially turn pirate?  Done - split into two sentences. It's not needed so removed, but technically you would officially becomes a pirate in the eyes of the law once an act of piracy has been committed.
      • "a bounty was placed on his head, and Low headed for the Azores" - repetition of "head"  Done
      • "are still being combed by treasure hunters looking for treasure in the ships he sank." - repetition  Done

Epbr123 19:16, 6 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your suggestions! Dones / not dones added. Neil ム 21:22, 7 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Some more:
    • "In a later trial on 10 July 1723 for a number of Low's crew" - "later" is redundant, "during" might be better than "in"  Done
    • "Harris returned to the UK, and was hanged at Wapping." - the UK didn't exist at the time  Done (doh)
    • "intending them to starve to death slowly" - I think the "slowly" is redundant  Done
    • "his crew refused to carry out his orders to torture the fisherman" - it should either be "a fisherman" or "the fishermen"  Done, typo fixed
    • "newly-captured ship" - -ly words don't usually need to be hyphenated as it's clear which two words belong together  Done
    • "he attacked thirteen New England fishing vessels" - 13  Done
    • "Johnson – considered to be Daniel Defoe" - maybe best to include the "Charles"  Done
    • "silk", "theft", burglary", "cannon", "postage stamp", "torture", "17th century", "seaweed" and "barnacles" don't need linking  Done - I've delinked a few of these, but some really should be linked.
      • None of those words adds context. A link to "theft" will not help readers understand this article better. Epbr123 09:20, 8 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
        • A pipelink to "theft" will help readers understand what the archaic term "thievery" means (Word usage that may be confusing to a non-native speaker). Ditto "burglary", which is not a widely-used word in many English speaking countries. Barnacles and seaweed ought to be linked - the link you give says "Relevant connections to the subject of another article that will help readers to understand the current article more fully". Plus the article has a reasonable "link density" at present. Neil ム 10:00, 8 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • Check that linked words are linked at their first occurence, eg. "Edward Teach", "cutlass"  Done
    • Some ship names need italicising  Done - one use missed and fixed
    • The Arthur Conan Doyle part of the lead should be mentioned in the body of the article.  Done - why?
    • Does Articles belong as a subsection of Flags?  Done - nope
    • Some ref titles and the External links section have improper dash usage.  Done - it might be better if you just fix this yourself, as it looks fine to me. If the title of a document or website doesn't use an em or en dash, I wouldn't use one when stating the title.
      • The dashes do need fixing. Wikipedia's formatting style has to be used, rather than the other website's. For the same reason, the upper case text needs to also be removed from some refs. Epbr123 09:20, 8 October 2007 (UTC) Done. Neil ム 09:49, 8 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Epbr123 00:42, 8 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Support Epbr123 12:32, 12 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Karanacs

Here are a few things that need to be fixed

Karanacs 17:20, 16 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comments: I see there've been many comments and alterations since I read this article, so feel free to ignore objections that have been met in the mean time.
    • In biographies the birth and death dates are usually put in brackets behind the name instead of in the lead's prose.  Done
    • "A thief and a scoundrel from a young age, he was born into poverty in Westminster, London around 1690 and moved" This is one of those inverted compound sentences that doesn't work. The clause before the comma is no bearing on his birth and so they shouldn't be linked together. Besides, it's probably better to use that description after you've described his birth so you don't label him as a scum baby.  Done (although he may have been a scum baby!)
    • Why is his birthdate in the 'Early life' section less specific than the one in the lead?  Done
    • "A brother was hanged at Tyburn for "thievery"." Was that one of his brothers or a monk/priest? What is the relevence to his criminal exploits? Sentence seems a bit disjointed from the rest of the text.  Done, sort of - clarified it was a brother as in relative. I think there's relevance in that it suggests his family were all impoverished criminals.
    • What was the birthdate of his deceased son?  Done - don't know, it is not in any of my resources.
    • "The loss of his wife had a profound affect on Low" That should be effect. (affect is verb, effect is noun)  Done
    • You might want to briefly mention why Francis Farrington Spriggs is worth mentioning by name when the rest of the gang wasn't.  Done - it's because he subsequently became a famous pirate in his own right
    • "Acquiring a taste for cruelty, Low taught Spriggs a torture technique which involved tying a victim's hands with rope between their fingers and setting them alight, burning their flesh down to the bones." When you teach somebody that, you aren't just acquiring a taste for cruelty, you already have it. Probably needs rephrasing.  Done
    • "no quarter would be given if any resisted"? Quarter as in shelter or money. To who, the captives or the pirates?  Done - neither money nor shelter - "no quarter" means no mercy (it's a fairly standard phrase). I have amended to "mercy", which is probably less evocative, but fine.
    • "Remaining off the coast of North America, a fishing boat was taken off Block Island." Who was remaining off the coast of NA? The fishing boat or Low? If it was Low, you should include a grammatical subject.  Done reworded
    • How can Low be both never heard from again and be hanged in Martinique?  Done - the section explains that there are conflicting accounts of Low's demise.

-- Mgm|(talk) 08:37, 24 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Responded. Neil ☎ 10:02, 24 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

No & Oppose Pass & support

What biases? - Mgm|(talk) 10:50, 27 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I will edit it later on today. In the meantime, please review the following in its entirely as you apparently do not understand it.
Leranedo/Learnedo, without a sample of why you consider the article POV, your "vote" can be considered invalid. Raul, the nominator, and all of us need to see your reasoning. The nominator can't address it if there is no example. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 22:37, 27 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
It reads like a story of a person who went from poverty to infamous fame, and as if we should feel pity for him, at least near the beginning. It wasn't encyclopedic. If someone who reads this cannot tell, I would be astounded. Some source are unreliable and apparently wrote for entertainment purposes and not for neutrality so the article can't really be balanced out. I would classify this as fiction for that is what it might as well be. Why are there "conflicting reports"? Because these are completely unreliable sources and I know I would want no knowledge than crap, false knowledge.
I had made minor editing, and will change to support when it's adequate enough. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Leranedo (talk • contribs) 04:14, 28 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I had to revert a couple of the changes, because you mutilated the grammar. And I mean really badly. Or should I say "you were said to have been described as having changed the grammar in an ill-mannered way"? Ah, I'm just joking - thank you for the edits. Neil ☎ 15:15, 28 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oh you're being silly. Two minor errors doesn't constitute mutilation, though I should have read it again however. Leranedo 21:20, 28 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Leranedo, commenting at FAC without providing examples makes it very hard to evaluate your concerns. Please provide at least an example of unreliable sources. You can't just ask other editors to read your mind or take your word for it; we need something to work with. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 16:28, 28 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support. Comments. I left some notes and sample edits on minor WP:DASH issues, and you have some text terribly squeezed (on my browser) between an image and a quote in the "Early 1723" section. Can you pls doublecheck your sources on this?
  • Costa Garda isn't grammatical in Spanish and it doesn't mean Coast Guard; maybe those pirates didn't have correct grammatical Spanish, though. Google coughs up the term a lot wrt piracy (first on Wiki though), but it does not translate to Coast Guard as we think of it in English, so I'm wondering about your translation and whether it's original research or a source actually says that's the translation (if so, pls doublecheck other sources). First, garda isn't even a Spanish word; second, Coast Guard in Spanish is guardacostas or guardia de la costa or guardia de costas. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 21:54, 27 October 2007 (UTC) PS, if you can't figure that one out, the PR Project might have someone who speaks Spanish piracy. Maybe it's a Portuguese permutation. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 22:02, 27 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • Dashes  Done Someone else can fix the dashes. Three different people have now told me to do three different things with them so they would support the FAC, citing different parts of the MOS. I am sick of messing about with dashes. If you want them fixed in a "just so" way, fix them yourself - I don't own the article. They look fine to me. Neil ☎ 15:15, 28 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • Resolution  Done - what resolution are you at? I've checked it at everything, 1600x1200, 1440x900, 1200x760 down to 800x600 - it looks fine, although a little tight at 800x600, there are FAs that looks heaps worse at such a low resolution. It looked horrible at 640x480, but surely nobody runs their computer at that any more?
    • "Costa garda"  Done - that should definitely be "Guarda". There are references for it being "Guarda del Costa" ([2], [3]). I think people may have got it mixed up because it tended to be simply referred to as the "Guarda". Fixed. Neil ☎ 15:15, 28 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
      • Good; but not done. I was noticing that Spanish bastardization coming up at Google thanks to Wiki :-) Um, it cannot be Guarda del Costa either, because it's La Costa (feminine)—I'm fluent, but not a native speaker. You may still need to get the Puerto Rican Project involved to straighten this out and help you find a highly reliable source relating to the piracy days, or let us know if it was just an example of poor Spanish grammar back in those days. I see the Gutenberg source at one point says guarda del costa, but later uses the grammatically correct guarda de costa; these are the kinds of issues that come up with translations (note that we are talking about a difference made by one or two letters here). Maybe you can punt this one and just use guarda de costa, since both of your sources use that, but I'd still recommend checking with the Puerto Rico Project, as they will know piracy stories. Sorry, but I have a big pet peeve about subtly incorrect original translations on Wiki, as they do tend to spread via Google, and we must get it right. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 16:45, 28 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
      • I've put it to "Guarda de Costa", I think unless the PR guys say otherwise, we're probably okay. Neil ☎ 18:15, 28 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment Just a couple of image issues:
    • Image:Lowstamp.jpg—I believe it's Wikipedia convention that non-free postage stamps should not be used to depict the subject of the stamp. (Cf. "to illustrate the stamp in question (as opposed to things appearing in the stamp's design)" from {{Non-free stamp}}.) I suggest removing. Image has been marked as orphaned.
    • Image:Ned Low at PTOC.jpg—A photograph of a work of art like this inherits the original copyright. That is, davelandweb.com does not own the copyright of this image—I would guess Disney does.
Pagrashtak 00:18, 29 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
      • Part done - I've removed the stamp image - it didn't add much to the article. The Disney artwork image - could you clarify? Do I need to update the copyright statement, remove the image, should it be fair use, what? Neil ☎ 09:37, 29 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
        • The copyright tag should be updated to indicate that the image is non-free. At that point, you'll need to either remove the image as replaceable, or, if you feel that only that particular image can serve its purpose, add rationale to the page stating why it can't be replaced by a free image. Pagrashtak 13:17, 29 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
          • Okay. (btw, I've deleted the Lowstamp.jpg image), and have updated the rationale of the Image:Ned Low at PTOC.jpg - is this satisfactory? If you still don't think it's fair use, let me know, or just remove it yourself - I tihnk it adds something and is discussed within the section, but am open to argument. Neil ☎ 13:26, 29 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support—Oh, this is excellent! Tony (talk) 01:17, 29 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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