Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Battle of Caishi/archive1
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was promoted by Ian Rose 13:24, 28 March 2014 [1].
The battle of Caishi was a major battle of the Jin–Song wars, which was recently promoted to FA. This article received a GA review in December and meets the criteria for a featured article.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 15:41, 18 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Image review
- Possible to enlarge the map slightly?
- Now fixed. Enlarged to 250px.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 08:42, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Songrivership3.jpg: source links appear broken. Nikkimaria (talk) 23:29, 18 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- How do I fix dead links for images?--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 08:42, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- There's some advice at Wikipedia:Link rot which might help. Hchc2009 (talk) 12:53, 17 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Now fixed. Link removed and replaced with an offline source, the book written by the uploader.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 17:11, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)
- "The Song were", "The Song had fought with the Jin for several decades, and lost all of its": Is "the Song" singular or plural? Be consistent. Most would say it's plural.
- I can't tell you how Wikipedians in general handle navboxes like
{{Jin campaigns against the Song Dynasty}}
, but history FAs, and particularly MilHist FAs, don't insert them into running text; if they're used at all, they go at the end of the article. If you want to introduce this information in the text, write it out, including the links.- Now fixed. Usually, campaignboxes belong below the infobox.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 21:15, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Sure, a campaignbox below the infobox is fine. - Dank (push to talk) 21:40, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Now fixed. Usually, campaignboxes belong below the infobox.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 21:15, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- The last paragraph in Battle_of_Caishi#Preparation for war is confusing.
- The last paragraph covers the numbers of casualties. Is there anything in particular that is ambiguous or in need of fixing?--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 21:15, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, it's not very well written, but I won't withhold support over it. Perhaps another reviewer will take a look. - Dank (push to talk) 21:38, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Did you spot any grammatical errors? Or are the problems related to sentence structure?--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 21:49, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, it's not very well written, but I won't withhold support over it. Perhaps another reviewer will take a look. - Dank (push to talk) 21:38, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- The last paragraph covers the numbers of casualties. Is there anything in particular that is ambiguous or in need of fixing?--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 21:15, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- "The Song may have surmised that the Jin were planning for a military offensive when they noticed that the attitude of one of the diplomats sent by the Jin had changed.": Don't report what was in people's heads (even if some historian puts it that way), report on what they did. (There's an exception to this advice, btw, at WP:Checklist#mindreading, but it doesn't apply here.) What did the Song do that suggests that they expected a military offensive? What did the diplomat do that suggested their attitude had changed?
- Now fixed. The History of Song alleges that a Jin diplomat "behaved insolently", and that this led them to believe that Jin were preparing to invade.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 17:44, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- "The Song fortified border defenses ahead of the invasion, but preparations had been delayed because of Gaozong's reluctance to antagonize the Jin.": This would be easier for the reader to parse in chronological order ... presumably, the delay came first, unless I'm misunderstanding. It's not clear to me what was or wasn't done to prepare. - Dank (push to talk) 03:03, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Now fixed. The Song received warnings of an impending war, but delayed fortifying.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 17:44, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 20:02, 8 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for the review!--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 21:15, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comment. Shouldn't the see also section have linked Jin–Song Wars instead of Jin campaigns against the Song Dynasty and the same for Timeline of the Jin campaigns against the Song Dynasty which needs to be moved to Timeline of the Jin–Song Wars Vctrbarbieri (talk) 16:39, 11 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Now fixed. I was away from the Wikipedia the week the move discussion took place. I have renamed the see also link.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 21:30, 19 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comments Support
- Great to see a battle from this period and region covered like this.
- File:Songrivership3.jpg; I'm presuming that this will need US and Chinese licensing tags to cover the underlying image? (Jieming can approve the photograph/scan, but he didn't make the original image).
- File:Wanyan Digunai cropped.jpg; again, will need licensing tags for the copyright of the creator of the modern bust.
- Now fixed. Replaced with File:Jurchen woodblock print.png.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 17:11, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- File:武经总要全前集卷十二 霹雳火球图.jpg. Presumably needs Chinese, as well as US, licensing tag.
- File:Songgaozong.jpg. Needs the original date of the painting to be added to the file to justify the licensing tag. Hchc2009 (talk)
- Now fixed. Replaced with File:Gaozong Of Song.jpg.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 17:11, 20 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Support This is a high quality article. I've made a brief copy-edit . One point I have to bring up is that ref 23 (Tao 2009) doesn't have a page number. Other than that, I have no problem with the article. 23 editor (talk) 18:43, 22 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by Madalibi
[edit]Comments Support – The nominator quickly and competently solved all the issues I raised (see collapsed list below). The article is now clearly written, accurate, fully referenced, and, as far as I can tell, complete. I've read all the main academic sources carefully – Chan 1992, Franke 1994, Mote 1999, Needham 1971 and 1987, and Tao 2002 and 2009 – and didn't find a single turn of phrase taken from them in the article. There is one DAB link to saltpeter (which I added myself), but that's because Joseph Needham speaks of the "nitrate" content of a gunpowder recipe without specifying what kind of nitrate it is, and "saltpeter" refers to four different kinds of nitrate that could go into making gunpowder, so I think the link is justified. In any case, Battle of Caishi is ready for WP's main page! T'was a pleasure working with you again, Khanate General! Madalibi (talk) 01:27, 25 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Once again, thank you for the review!--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 10:54, 26 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- You're very welcome! Madalibi (talk) 05:45, 28 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Solved issues
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Hi Khanate General! It's nice to see that you keep lifting these articles to featured status. This is again a high-quality article that should have no problem passing. I've already made a few edits to improve style and to put a number of sentences in the active voice.[2] Feel free to revert if you think I modified the meaning of anything or inserted mistakes into the text! My comments won't be as long as for Jin–Song Wars , but I've still found a few issues. Let me start with the first three paragraphs of the "Background" section, which I think are the softest.
Now the details:
A few follow-up issues:
Well, that's about it, and these should be my last comments before giving my formal support! All the best, Madalibi (talk) 01:13, 24 March 2014 (UTC)[reply] |
- Closing note: This candidate has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 06:11, 28 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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