User talk:Whouse141

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Hello, Whouse141, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Elysia and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:58, 14 January 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hi Whitney! First off I love the topic idea. I do think that there needs to be a lot of organizational edits made. Something that will help is if you add headings and subheadings to your article, this will allow you to break up your paragraphs and allow your readers to know what is coming. When it comes to your lead section, it is suppose to inform your reader what is to come in the rest of your article rather than background information, I ended up making a very similar mistake too. Jordan Preston20:26, 28 March 2019 (UTC)Jmoore31 (talk)

Peer review

Great topic. Overall a solid draft. Your article definitely needs more clear sections. Use the wiki formatting to break up in specific section topics. Also, work is needed on the citations, specifically linking the in text citations to the ones at the bottom. Another consideration is linking some of the important terms to other wiki articles, so readers can easily obtain other background information. Some sentence structure issues as well, most of those are listed in sandbox edits. Good overall, just needs finishing touches and formatting changes. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jcook1400 (talk • contribs) 21:06, 30 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer review - Grant

The subject of your article is very interesting, I have never thought about the origin of domesticated cats and how extensive it dates back. I recommend adding titles for each section to help provide direction for the reader prior to diving into the section. I recommend revising some of your sentences to help improve flow, and I noticed your subject and verb tense is not consistent. You need to maintain the same tense through each sentence as well as through each section. This will make it easier to read and greatly improve the overall flow of the article. For your citations you can utilize wikipedia's program that manually cites an article for you and formats it. Also, try to relate to the articles you are using when referencing a specific study. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Advevol (talk • contribs) 23:01, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer review review

Hi Whitney! This is a good start to an interesting article. You've done a great job considering you switched your topic last minute, but there is still a ways to go. The reviewers have pointed this out, but you need to have the Wikipedia format and formatting (lead section, sections in Wikipedia format, citations in Wikipedia format, article table of contents, etc.). You have a lot of great info in your article, but definitely divide up your article in to smaller sections with headers (think of it in an outline format). Your reviewers have done a great job editing the writing, so go ahead and address those comments.

Finally, topic-wise, there are more recent papers you need to cite. A couple of recent genetic/genomic studies are adding to this story, and the take-home is that cats aren't really domesticated in the same way that dogs are (there aren't genetic signatures of domestication in domestic cats vs. wild felines). You can add this info in an additional section. Here are some important references:

Montague, M. J. et al. Comparative analysis of the domestic cat genome reveals genetic signatures underlying feline biology and domestication. Proc. Natl Acad. Sci. USA 111, 17230–17235 (2014).

The palaeogenetics of cat dispersal in the ancient world. Ottoni et al. Nature Ecology & Evolution volume1, Article number: 0139 (2017)

Here is a recent news article summarizing that last paper, to give you an idea of how to include it: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/06/domesticated-cats-dna-genetics-pets-science/

I would do an expanded literature search and see if there are any others. I think that with a bit of work, this could be a really great addition to Wikipedia! Advevol (talk) 00:01, 1 April 2019 (UTC)

peer review response

I was very thankful for the observations and recommendations that the peer reviewers of my paper made. All of them mentioned breaking up my paper into smaller sections and add heading to these sections. Now that I have that complete I feel like it helps the flow of my paper and also helps the reader follow the direction my paper is taking them. All the grammatical mistakes have been corrected and changed which also greatly improved the flow of my paper. The papers that were requested to use added a lot of additional information into my paper and allowed me to create a whole new section on the differentiation of cat breeds. It was a great addition to my paper and I was happy with the recommendation. The reviewers also mentioned linking my articles to others that will be helpful which I have also completed. This helps the reader find information on topics they may have not heard of before. The last recommendation I took and utilized was linking my references in the article and inserting a reference list which I think helped the reader easily see where I obtained my information and easily find and read the papers I used if they are interested in them.

Whouse141 (talk) 17:40, 15 April 2019 (UTC)

Ways to improve Evolution of the domesticated cat

Hello, Whouse141,

Thanks for creating Evolution of the domesticated cat! I edit here too, under the username Doomsdayer520 and it's nice to meet you :-)

I wanted to let you know that I have tagged the page as having some issues to fix, as a part of our page curation process and note that:-

Thank you for your new article on the Evolution of the domesticated cat. Note that the article is currently an "orphan" meaning that no other Wikipedia articles link TO it. This makes the article tough to find for interested readers. See WP:DE-ORPHAN for pointers.

The tags can be removed by you or another editor once the issues they mention are addressed. If you have questions, leave a comment here and prepend it with {{Re|Doomsdayer520}}. And, don't forget to sign your reply with ~~~~ . For broader editing help, please visit the Teahouse.

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---DOOMSDAYER520 (Talk|Contribs) 14:34, 26 April 2019 (UTC)