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Week 6 _ Post links for Writing Class
[edit]Emergent Algorithm https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emergent_algorithm
Parametric design https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Parametric_design
Isaac Asimov https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Isaac_Asimov
Grasshopper 3D https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Grasshopper_3D
Digital Modeling and Fabrication https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Digital_modeling_and_fabrication
Week 9 Possible Wikiproject Topics (MIT 21G.219 Writing workshop Assignment)
[edit]- Option 1 (top choice)
Shape Grammar
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shape_grammar
In the Definition part, sentences are choppy. A possible contribution to this topic would be combine sentences to make it more academic. We have read some relative papers about shape grammar, I think i can also add some examples to it.
resources:
http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1068/b070209?id=b070209
https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007%2FBF01578998
https://libraries.mit.edu/news/podcast-professor-4/1115/
http://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1068/b050005
- Option 2
Digital Modeling and Fabrication
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Digital_modeling_and_fabrication
There are some place that I can improve. First, I can introduce more in modeling related to this topic.
resources:
http://papers.cumincad.org/data/works/att/81b8.content.pdf
http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0142694X05000864
- Option 3
Parametric design
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Parametric_design
Your top choice...
[edit]Dyson, These changes look pretty minimal. Can you be more specific about what examples and other things you would add that are needed? Eric WritingMan (talk) 16:42, 2 November 2017 (UTC)
New topic of Wikiproject
[edit]- Hi Eric,
Thanks for your suggestions. However I found that the topics I raised before bring me many difficulties in finding proper useful resources to cite and creating new paragraphs. Besides, the 'Shape Grammar' is original research so it might not be a good choice. Sorry that I did not notice this.
My new topic would be 'Yao Dong'. It is a kind of cave dwelling in my hometown Sanmenxia and my grandparents used to live in a "Yao dong", therefore it is a good choice for me to add something useful to wiki. Moreover, my Architecture background will also allow me to add detailed construction and design related content.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yaodong
- more details to the two types of Yao dong due to its inaccuracy of classification. The sunken courtyard one has a new scenic area established in Sanmenxia
- construction process according to resources
resources:
http://www.szdky.cn/en/index.aspx
http://daneshyari.com/article/preview/6460191.pdf
http://www.bcin.ca/Interface/openbcin.cgi?submit=submit&Chinkey=438238
Bernard Rudofsky’s Architecture without Architects
Good rescources
[edit]the types of yaodong and some examples
2. cliff cave, underground cave and hoop cave
3. the underground dwelling https://thefunambulist.net/architectural-projects/architectures-without-architects-tungkwan
4. the construction technique (in chinese) https://books.google.com/books?id=LePZCQAAQBAJ&pg=PT181&lpg=PT181&dq=%E5%9C%B0%E5%9D%91%E9%99%A2&source=bl&ots=jTscCS3Z-R&sig=YpoSKZoG187RDp83ZP3lDl_Dcu8&hl=en&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwjb94SRtdvXAhVp0oMKHUcKD-A4ChDoAQhOMAc#v=onepage&q=%E5%9C%B0%E5%9D%91%E9%99%A2&f=false
its info: http://www.bcin.ca/Interface/openbcin.cgi?submit=submit&Chinkey=438238
5.dikengyuan (could cite) the Sunken courtyard http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S074301671630081X?via%3Dihub
Peer Review_Katetwowiki
[edit]Things that are good:
1. adding Chinese explanation to some contents, which may be easier for Chinese readers, who might be the main readers because Yaodong is mainly located in China, to understand; 2. providing further readings; 3. linking contents to related articles in Wikipedia; 4. pictures are used in this article, but I'm not sure if the picture are from the original article.
Suggestions:
1. add more contents to this article because currently the article seems not complete, 2. correct grammar error.
--Katetwowiki (talk) 04:07, 29 November 2017 (UTC)
Hi Katetwowiki, thank you for your advice.Vacuum Dyson (talk) 17:52, 11 December 2017 (UTC)