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Your submission at Articles for creation: David Jarrett Collins (September 11)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Eternal Shadow was:

This submission does not appear to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article. Entries should be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources. Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms that promote the subject.

The comment the reviewer left was:

Quite a bit of promotional prose. I recommend you read WP:PUFFERY.

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Eternal Shadow Talk 03:30, 11 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, UKI2020! Having an article declined at Articles for Creation can be disappointing. If you are wondering why your article submission was declined, please post a question at the Articles for creation help desk. If you have any other questions about your editing experience, we'd love to help you at the Teahouse, a friendly space on Wikipedia where experienced editors lend a hand to help new editors like yourself! See you there! Eternal Shadow Talk 03:30, 11 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: David Jarrett Collins (December 14)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by Theroadislong was:

This submission's references do not show that the subject qualifies for a Wikipedia article—that is, they do not show significant coverage (not just passing mentions) about the subject in published, reliable, secondary sources that are independent of the subject (see the guidelines on the notability of people). Before any resubmission, additional references meeting these criteria should be added (see technical help and learn about mistakes to avoid when addressing this issue). If no additional references exist, the subject is not suitable for Wikipedia.

The comment the reviewer left was:

too much unsourced content and puffery

Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved.

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Theroadislong (talk) 10:29, 14 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: David Jarrett Collins (July 8)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reasons left by Nightenbelle were:

This submission is not adequately supported by reliable sources. Reliable sources are required so that information can be verified. If you need help with referencing, please see Referencing for beginners and Citing sources.

This submission does not appear to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article. Entries should be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources. Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms that promote the subject.

The comment the reviewer left was:

WP is not a valid source for content on WP. See WP:CIR Also, reads like a publicity piece not an encyclopedia article. Remove puffery and revise.

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Nightenbelle (talk) 16:37, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hyperlinks

There should not be hyperlinks in the body of the article, such as in Awards. David notMD (talk) 17:32, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Ok - I have removed all hyperlinks and replaced them with citations. --UKI2020 (talk) 17:53, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Refs

Check all your refs. You should not cite another encyclopedia, and you cannot use a pdf of a newspaper article, as that is a copyright infraction (ref #5). All that is needed is that you cite the newspaper, date and pages. The lead is a bit blah (and short). Can add that at Sylvania in 1960, he led a team that developed the first functional bar code system, for tracking railroad cars, and subsequently worked on developing laser bar code systems. David notMD (talk) 21:34, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I can't tell you how grateful I am for your help. I've updated citations to remove the encyclopedia, put in the newspaper information instead of the PDF, and updated the top line. Thank you again. --UKI2020 (talk) 22:13, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Your submission at Articles for creation: David Jarrett Collins has been accepted

David Jarrett Collins, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.

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―Qwerfjkl talk 18:39, 12 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Congrats for getting an interesting article accepted. David notMD (talk) 01:43, 18 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]