User talk:Sbugden/sandbox

Peer Review

After reading your draft it is very evident that you know your topic well, and have done a lot of research. There are a few points I'd like to comment on:

1. Introduction: I would suggest avoiding a whole lot of information on predator mimicry, as this is covered already on Wikipedia (see Batesian mimicry). While it may be beneficial to include it in your article for comparison purposes, try to stay away from it throughout your introduction. Additionally, the definition you provided could be a little more clear.

2. Sources: After reviewing a few of your sources you appear to have a great start on finding articles related to your topic. I like that you outlined important research and information from each article using citations. It is very clear that you know you've read and understand your articles.

3. Format: Try using headings & subheadings to give readers an overall idea of what your final draft will look like. This would definitely be helpful when you are creating your article as well.

4. Additional suggestions: I would suggest providing more information about why this is seen in animals and what the purpose of this behaviour is. How do animals benefit from locomotor mimicry? Are there differences regarding intent of mimicry seen across species?

Overall, this seems like a very interesting and well researched topic and I am excited to read your final product! Sydneymanuel (talk) 19:48, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks! Sbugden (talk) 19:50, 30 October 2017 (UTC)

Donovan's Peer Review

Hi, it certainly seems like you have your ideas, and sources ready to really start to dive into this article. First off, in the lead paragraph I would stick to defining the term at hand. I would briefly mention "Batesian Mimicry" and link it to the previously made page on that topic just because the lead paragraph should just be a quick overview into the topic and then begin going into detail in the later paragraphs. After viewing your sources they all seem legitimate, which is great! I would recommend doing a layout of how your going to organize your article. I have seen various other people do it, along with myself and it seems to really help. This way you can sort what information your going to put where and so on. Overall, seems like your doing good. If possible I would add something on the causation of the behavior as a common question for most behaviors is "why does this animal do that?" Good luck, looking forward to reading your final article! Djmoq3 (talk) 20:41, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks! Sbugden (talk) 19:49, 30 October 2017 (UTC)